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From: Al Da Beatz
Registered: Sep 2014

posted March 03, 2015 05:59 PM            

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Sitting on rocks, by river shore,
I envision your face, am tempted more,
With scraps that flow, on sheet of river,
I feel as am floating, and I endeavour,
To quench your voice, and feel your heart,
Looking to eternity, and floating apart,
The birds they fly and leave the nest,
And sun too dawns, and leaves the rest,
Lest I fall, from rocks in shore,
As waves they splatter, and fell ignored,
The shrubs they bloom, some purple flower,
And lips like your, spread some power,
As the tides grow, I feel afraid,
And the bubbles swell up, from river’s shade,
Of breath of the air, flowing from it,
In river my love, my preciousness lit,
Like souls that traverse, nimble as sport,
The air looked foggy, with white coat,
And patrolling the air, the distance blew,
Moulding you as me, and me as you..

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From: Ohio
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posted March 04, 2015 02:30 PM            

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Reads and feels like a most poetically beautiful love letter; channelling winding through and reaching out into the cosmos.

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posted March 04, 2015 07:19 PM            

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Beautiful atmosphere and content. Flowing, both in music and imagery. Etheral.

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posted March 06, 2015 03:32 PM            

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wwwwwow! TQ, I love this! just all-around love this!

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posted March 07, 2015 09:19 AM            

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From: Al Da Beatz
Registered: Sep 2014

posted March 08, 2015 01:53 AM            

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Thanks a lot Pearlty, Ayelet, mirage, Randall

Yes it's a message to the cosmos, I wrote this while sitting on the shore of river for someone I love very dearly…because I feel so moulded in them…lol.. ..it's like sometimes you don't speak but still you say everything...

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From: Ohio
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posted March 08, 2015 12:26 PM            

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"Yes it's a message to the cosmos, I wrote this while sitting on the shore of river for someone I love very dearly…because I feel so moulded in them…lol.. ..it's like sometimes you don't speak but still you say everything..."

Understood, and can resonate. Sometimes when connections are intense and have such impact on our lives- it's difficult yet beautiful to not be able to feel or tell where they begin and you end, or they end and you begin. Circuliar and Inter-woven..threads.

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posted March 08, 2015 05:24 PM            

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At first look I thought it was a bit messy, then at a second look and seeing more clearly, I can say this is quite amaxing and complex, the way it is made cost me to comprehend because of it's very high level, and it took me a few reads to fully understand it, but I'm very amazed on this work, very amazed.

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From: Al Da Beatz
Registered: Sep 2014

posted March 08, 2015 06:01 PM            

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Thanks LF DX I'm glad you like it and spent your precious time comprehending…

Pearlty, I love your description which if arranged is a little poem in itself. You get it at the subtle level and depth...
…."where they begin and you end, or they end and you begin"…..lovely

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posted May 13, 2015 10:47 AM            

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Bump!

Re-read, envokes such tranquility.

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