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posted November 04, 2012 10:31 AM            

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Whipped this up spontaneously as a response to Derrick C. Brown's A Finger, Two Dots, then Me. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jidS7djf0yM

It applies to all the poetry I love.

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Vivid is a love song
Clarity a kiss
For specks of comprehension
I've lingered on like this.

2
Speech can knit completion
Language bridging rifts
Spirit loops a circuit
And I feel the planet shift.

3
Poignancy one-ups itself
The song plays through the spheres
A music that's electric, secret
angels in our ears.

4
You've consecrated closeness
With these rudiments of sound
A simple phrase that wanders long
And thus my heart is found.

A little corny but so am I.

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posted November 06, 2012 11:21 AM            

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Awww...

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posted November 10, 2012 06:37 PM            

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LOVE this, Faith! So poignant and lyrical, very beautiful to read.

Thanks so much for sharing

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posted November 11, 2012 10:22 PM            

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Thanks!

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posted November 30, 2012 08:27 AM            

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All 4 verses are beautiful.

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posted November 30, 2012 08:53 AM            

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I agree, beautiful verses!! Excellent!

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posted December 01, 2012 08:56 AM            

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Glad it made sense!

Here is the really excellent short film for "A Finger, Two Dots, then Me."

I didn't post it at first because the video kept stalling on me:

Awesomeness

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posted December 02, 2012 06:08 AM            

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That is a beautiful poem and Derrick Brown is an outstanding reader, and writer. Thank you for sharing, I really connected with that, thank you.

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