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Ayelet
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posted December 06, 2017 04:58 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Ayelet     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Once Upon A Time

If there was no past
I would never have trodden
this broken path
of selfish leaves and hearts
yellow, brown and reddish
thrown under your feet
Great Caesar, your majesty

Flying, I was shot
to bleed through your chest
a graceful butterfly
one of your heart beats
taking my leave

And so you said you loved me

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mirage29
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posted December 07, 2017 11:49 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for mirage29     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
What a most-colorful ode to love.

That's just a Beautiful piece of writing, Ayelet. Love the way you pivot-- graced with turns and reversals...

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LF DX
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posted December 07, 2017 01:13 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for LF DX     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Well, this is one of the best you wrote Aye, pretty amazing.

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mirage29
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posted December 07, 2017 06:05 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for mirage29     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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(music) Once Upon A Time (Vic Damone) [2:27] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vUrmcEEnFwM

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Ayelet
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posted December 07, 2017 06:14 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Ayelet     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Thanks Mirage and LF DX!

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Pearlty
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posted December 12, 2017 09:30 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Pearlty     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote

Sadly beautiful to read, and the moment is articulated so well in this..

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posted December 12, 2017 12:28 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for thequeen     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Hi Ayelet,

I totally missed the essence of the poem. Can you explain it briefly to me. I read it quite a number of times but could not get to the core feelings here.I understood the first half but missed the second part of it.

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Ayelet
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posted December 12, 2017 06:30 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Ayelet     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Thank you Pearlty
Thequeen: concerning the second half - I am being sacrified on the altar of love. I am a flying butterfly who is shot, and I fleet to another world as I am also a single heart beat of my lover, who rules me, but is also ruled by my sacrifice.I am escaping his chest through bleeding, as the heart beat is leaving him. If his heart misses that beat, then he also misses me.
All this complete the first half of the poem, where I am trodden by my ruler, sacrificed as well, and if this sacrifice is righteous, only he can tell...

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posted December 13, 2017 01:14 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for thequeen     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Ok how beautifully you put it. But that's very deep indeed. Love it

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mirage29
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posted December 13, 2017 10:03 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for mirage29     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
(breathtaking image! wow..., definition of 'intimacy'..., just wow)

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Randall
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posted December 14, 2017 02:14 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Arguably my favorite poem on here. *sniffle*

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Pearlty
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posted December 14, 2017 04:56 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Pearlty     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote

Ayelet, your interpretation to thequeen
a poem that stands in itself...

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Ayelet
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posted December 16, 2017 12:04 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Ayelet     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Thank you all

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posted December 16, 2017 12:55 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for mirage29     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
.....

(music) You Go To My Head (Ella Fitzgerald) [4:50] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ANyNbVKys_A

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Ayelet
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posted December 22, 2017 06:50 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Ayelet     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Beautiful music
{{Mirage}}

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posted January 11, 2018 08:51 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote

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posted February 02, 2018 07:33 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
She's the music video queen.

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posted February 03, 2018 07:15 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote

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posted April 01, 2018 07:07 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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posted April 17, 2018 10:56 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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posted June 20, 2018 10:51 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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