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Topic: Alteration
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Ayelet Moderator Posts: 2768 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted July 05, 2018 07:22 PM
AlterationSombody's knocking at my door I feel alive because he comes And takes my breath away 'Tis a solemn solitude Filled with mice and what else I cry and a baby's born In another world What could you have done for me? I need naught, let me be A Silhouette of shattered glasses over musing views He, who has the gift of speaking, must be Silent now. Ravens weeping. I Am leaving bliss for what tastes better In a tongue undivided, uttered, altered in our mind And everybody laughs IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 10121 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted July 05, 2018 08:07 PM
Wow. That's powerful, and puzzle-like. Reminds me of the kinds of things Linda writes about? The issues revolving around immortality. This was a Goober~like treat.., and yet, leaves me with a kind of shudder or a chill. So good to see your Creative Work, Ayelet!
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 99098 From: From a galaxy, far, far away... Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 06, 2018 09:59 AM
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Ayelet Moderator Posts: 2768 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted July 07, 2018 07:25 AM
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 99098 From: From a galaxy, far, far away... Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 25, 2018 06:47 PM
Yes, very Gooberz-like.IP: Logged |
LF DX Knowflake Posts: 570 From: Paraguay Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 25, 2018 09:05 PM
It's quite puzzling what you've done with this, kind of different of what you write, but it's quite good.IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 99098 From: From a galaxy, far, far away... Registered: Apr 2009
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posted August 06, 2018 02:19 PM
quote: Originally posted by LF DX: It's quite puzzling what you've done with this, kind of different of what you write, but it's quite good.
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