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Topic: My College Biography Profile (comments?)
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coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 01:06 PM
Writing has been my passion since I was a child. Unfortunately I did not pursue my dream because I was discouraged by my family that it would not be a stable or successful career for me. Now that I am a work from home mom I have more free time than most and often feel inspired by my wonderful eight year old son whom aspires to be an astronaut. He costantly reminds me what most adults, including me, often forget, to dream big and know in your heart of hearts that they will come true. So better late than never, I am ready to dive in! My writing is pretty rusty, but not my imagination. I am not yet certain of my career goals, however, "If one advances confidently in the direction of his dreams, and endesvors to live the life which he has imagined, he will meet with a success unexpected in common hours" (Henry David Thoreau) I am following my instinct and I believe in the end it will bring me to where I'm supposed to be. I am very ecstatic to begin! IP: Logged |
AcousticGod Knowflake Posts: 4424 From: Pleasanton, CA Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 01:39 PM
Typo on "endesvors". Accidentally hit the 's' instead of the 'a'.
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 4852 From: The Goober Galaxy Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 01:47 PM
A few comma errors.------------------ "Cooking is like love. It should be entered into with abandon or not at all." Harriet Van Horne IP: Logged |
coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 02:27 PM
Thank you AC and Randall <3Randall, can you help me with the commas? IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 4852 From: The Goober Galaxy Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 02:32 PM
Writing has been my passion since I was a child. Unfortunately, I did not pursue my dream, because I was discouraged by my family that it would not be a stable or successful career for me. Now that I am a work from home mom, I have more free time than most and often feel inspired by my wonderful eight-year-old son, whom aspires to be an astronaut. He constantly reminds me what most adults, including me, often forget--to dream big and know in your heart of hearts that they will come true. So, better late than never. I am ready to dive in! My writing is pretty rusty, but not my imagination.I am not yet certain of my career goals; however, "If one advances confidently in the direction of his dreams, and endeavors to live the life which he has imagined, he will meet with a success unexpected in common hours" (Henry David Thoreau). I am following my instinct, and I believe in the end it will bring me to where I'm supposed to be. I am very ecstatic to begin!
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scorpio17 Knowflake Posts: 636 From: Netherlands Registered: Dec 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 02:34 PM
I knew it.IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 4852 From: The Goober Galaxy Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 02:36 PM
You also have "constantly" spelled wrong. I also added hyphens, a semicolon, and corrected a run-on sentence. Work-at-home is traditionally hyphenated, but you said work from home, so I'm not sure and left it as is. ------------------ "Cooking is like love. It should be entered into with abandon or not at all." Harriet Van Horne IP: Logged |
coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 02:45 PM
Thank you, Birthday Boy I didn't see that constant typo, thanks!IP: Logged |
LEXX Moderator Posts: 4632 From: Still out looking for Schr�dinger's cat.........& LEXIGRAMMING... is my Passion! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 19, 2011 04:14 PM
This is a fabulous book! Click here for details! Eats, Shoots & LeavesIP: Logged |
coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 05:37 PM
Thanks LEXX IP: Logged |
Ami Anne Moderator Posts: 5362 From: Pluto/house next to NickiG Registered: Sep 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 05:41 PM
((((CCM))) Our dreams are so precious.They were put inside us for a reason. I am your biggest cheerleader. Love you,Baby!
------------------ Jesus never put his trust in man cuz he knew what was in man. You must face,touch and feel the dregs of Nessus before you can grasp the pristine beauty of Neptune. Me IP: Logged |
coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 19, 2011 06:06 PM
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BearsArcher Moderator Posts: 532 From: Arizona with Bear the Leo Registered: Apr 2010
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posted January 20, 2011 02:48 AM
quote: Originally posted by coconutcancermoon: Writing has been my passion since I was a child. Unfortunately, I did not pursue my dream because I was discouraged by my family, as I was told that it would not be a stable or successful career. However, now that I am a work from home mother, I have more time to fulfill my aspirations as a writer. I have found that I am inspired by my wonderful eight year old son as he shares his dreams of aspiring to become astronaut. He constantly reminds me of what we often forget as busy adults, which is to dream big and to know that in your heart of hearts that your dreams will come true if you believe and persevere. So now I am dreaming big and giving life back to my imagination through my writing skills. I am ready to dive in and face any challenge! Although I am not yet certain of my career goals, I do believe in the words of Henry David Thoreau, "If one advances confidently in the direction of his dreams, and endeavors to live the life which he has imagined, he will meet with a success unexpected in common hours" (you need to put a citation here, especially if it is college related)
I looked through your quote and made some changes (that is the editor in me and post grad). I hope you don't mind Helps if I can spell LOL.... IP: Logged |
coconutcancermoon Moderator Posts: 273 From: A Place of Pure Love Registered: Nov 2010
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posted January 20, 2011 05:13 AM
quote: Originally posted by BearsArcher: I looked through you quote and made some changes (that is the editor in me and post grad). I hope you don't mind
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Lonake Knowflake Posts: 3015 From: Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 20, 2011 05:29 AM
should be 'eight-year-old' = hyphenatedIP: Logged |