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Topic: My Novel
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raj_105_2001 Knowflake Posts: 1219 From: Chennai Registered: Apr 2001
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posted September 19, 2002 02:11 PM
Please comment on this story, folks, especially Magica if you are around, tell me whether you can understand it.Once upon a time, there lived in a Kingdom two craftsmen Goga and Laker. Goga weaved a net for a girl named Kichiga, who was in love with Jar. Jar too in turn was in love with Kichiga. As far the personality of Goga, it can be said he more or less resembled a huge elephant being just let out of a zoo. Yet Goga tried all means to win the attention of Kichiga, to no avail. His every move, only led to more hatred from Jar's beloved. Kichiga lives in an eternal sea of confusion, when an Invisible detective comes to the rescue. Nobody knows who he is, what his profession is, yet he is a close friend and associate of Jar. He explains to Kichiga, that the elephant which professes to help her, is actually mis-leading her. That she is being tricked by hapless souls, it is time she woke up and begins to see sense. (He doesn't even mention his name to her, though). That if she trusted the elephant, she would never re-unite with Jar, her twin soul and soul mate put together. Unless Kichiga meets Jar and confesses her love to her beloved, she is going to drown in hell forever. The ending of the story is Jar and Kichiga married happily.
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raj_105_2001 Knowflake Posts: 1219 From: Chennai Registered: Apr 2001
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posted September 21, 2002 01:12 AM
The funniest part of the story is goga's gang trying to fool Jar, that Kichiga does not love him at all. In addition, they would try to divert him to an ugly ogre. Kichiga would wake up at the last minute.Not too late, anyway. IP: Logged |
QueenofSheeba Moderator Posts: 738 From: California, USA Registered: Feb 2003
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posted September 21, 2002 02:01 PM
Do you have a draft of the story yet,or just the outline?------------------ "The barn has burned down,and now I can see the moon"-Zen saying. IP: Logged | |