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posted September 24, 2003 08:30 PM         

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Broken One
R.Dafremen

I know I let you down
Heart so heavy, drags me down
Down into the gutter
With my shame
Noone to blame but myself
Couldn't think to blame anybody else
I see
The pain that you hide so well behind your angry eyes
I feel
That the unwanted wounded in me has let us down
All of us
Every time
Your heart must ache beyond the breaking
Weep when seeping bitter betrayal seems to laugh again
And here I am
The unforgiven broken one who lets you down.

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posted October 11, 2003 02:48 AM         

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This poem sounds very musical or reminds me of something musical. Did you feel that it was musical dafremen?

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posted October 11, 2003 01:17 PM         

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Most of them are. I wish I had a voice to sing. Can anyone sing that wouldn't mind hearing me caterwall the tunes so that they could translate them into something more pleasing to the ear?

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posted October 12, 2003 01:29 PM         

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"Never mentally imagine for another that which you would not want to experience for yourself, since the mental image you send out inevitably comes back to you." Rebecca Clark

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posted October 12, 2003 04:10 PM         

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I could sing if I could just quit smoking.

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