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Eternal Blue
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posted October 16, 2004 12:04 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
I'll stay
Because you are here
And you'll never betray
Me, I try to believe
You guide me through it all
Through the changing seasons
You're so great, and I'm so small
'Hold on,' you say, and you give me the reasons
I live in the dark, you bring the light
When I thirst, you are the spring
When things go wrong, you make them right
I live in silence, but then you sing
This is a perfect place
You try to take away me sorrow
Maybe there's no need to be afraid
As long as you're here, I won't go

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 16, 2004 12:08 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message

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aqua
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posted October 16, 2004 01:15 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for aqua     Edit/Delete Message
what's this for?

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 16, 2004 01:43 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
I don't really know what you meant, aqua. Did you mean my poem or my reply? I just figured this work was not good enough, although I posted it here anyway.

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 16, 2004 01:56 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
And the title does seem odd. What I was trying to say was "if this person remained here, this would be a perfect place for me to be". Just an idea.

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Charlotte
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posted October 18, 2004 04:01 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Charlotte     Edit/Delete Message
Awww, I understood what you were trying to say... It was sweet! you are talented.
I think Aqua meant the red faces.

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 20, 2004 03:02 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
A BIG thank you, Charlotte...

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aqua
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posted October 22, 2004 03:14 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for aqua     Edit/Delete Message
oh i am so sorry for making u wait.
yes charlotte got it.

the poem is really a good one eternal why do u feel its not?

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 23, 2004 05:29 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
Thanks aqua! What should I say...? Should I analyse it? When I wrote it down I really poured it out from my heart but I just thought it lacked sophistication...anyway, I was sharing my feeling, which I believe is the point

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Sheaa Olein
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posted October 23, 2004 05:46 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Sheaa Olein     Edit/Delete Message
I don't understand why you were putting yourself down Eternal.

It's beautiful.. it is clear it came from the heart It expresses what it does in the best way it can, and the title perfectly reflects that. I've related several heart wrenching experiences to it already

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"We see everything through a glass, darkly. Sometimes we can peer through the glass and catch a glimpse of what is on the other side. If we were to polish the glass clean, we'd see much more. But then we would no longer see ourselves." From 'Deep Quotes'

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 23, 2004 06:03 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message
Thank you so much Sheaa Olein! I don't know what to say...all I can say is I'm very happy that I've received such positive responses, especially your feedback

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aqua
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posted October 28, 2004 10:59 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for aqua     Edit/Delete Message

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Eternal Blue
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posted October 28, 2004 05:36 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Eternal Blue     Edit/Delete Message

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