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Topic: Perfect Place
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Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 16, 2004 12:04 AM
I'll stay Because you are here And you'll never betray Me, I try to believe You guide me through it all Through the changing seasons You're so great, and I'm so small 'Hold on,' you say, and you give me the reasons I live in the dark, you bring the light When I thirst, you are the spring When things go wrong, you make them right I live in silence, but then you sing This is a perfect place You try to take away me sorrow Maybe there's no need to be afraid As long as you're here, I won't goIP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 16, 2004 12:08 AM
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aqua Knowflake Posts: 783 From: dreamland Registered: Jan 2004
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posted October 16, 2004 01:15 AM
what's this for?IP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 16, 2004 01:43 AM
I don't really know what you meant, aqua. Did you mean my poem or my reply? I just figured this work was not good enough, although I posted it here anyway. IP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 16, 2004 01:56 AM
And the title does seem odd. What I was trying to say was "if this person remained here, this would be a perfect place for me to be". Just an idea.IP: Logged |
Charlotte Knowflake Posts: 270 From: Tn. USA Registered: Apr 2004
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posted October 18, 2004 04:01 AM
Awww, I understood what you were trying to say... It was sweet! you are talented. I think Aqua meant the red faces.IP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 20, 2004 03:02 AM
A BIG thank you, Charlotte... IP: Logged |
aqua Knowflake Posts: 783 From: dreamland Registered: Jan 2004
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posted October 22, 2004 03:14 AM
oh i am so sorry for making u wait. yes charlotte got it.the poem is really a good one eternal why do u feel its not? IP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 23, 2004 05:29 AM
Thanks aqua! What should I say...? Should I analyse it? When I wrote it down I really poured it out from my heart but I just thought it lacked sophistication...anyway, I was sharing my feeling, which I believe is the point IP: Logged |
Sheaa Olein Moderator Posts: 1302 From: In the office, UK Registered: Jul 2004
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posted October 23, 2004 05:46 AM
I don't understand why you were putting yourself down Eternal.It's beautiful.. it is clear it came from the heart It expresses what it does in the best way it can, and the title perfectly reflects that. I've related several heart wrenching experiences to it already ------------------ "We see everything through a glass, darkly. Sometimes we can peer through the glass and catch a glimpse of what is on the other side. If we were to polish the glass clean, we'd see much more. But then we would no longer see ourselves." From 'Deep Quotes' IP: Logged |
Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 23, 2004 06:03 AM
Thank you so much Sheaa Olein! I don't know what to say...all I can say is I'm very happy that I've received such positive responses, especially your feedback IP: Logged |
aqua Knowflake Posts: 783 From: dreamland Registered: Jan 2004
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posted October 28, 2004 10:59 AM
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Eternal Blue Knowflake Posts: 129 From: Registered: Aug 2004
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posted October 28, 2004 05:36 PM
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