Posts: 1730
From: sleepy Rocky Mountain village
Registered: Dec 2002

posted November 17, 2004 02:08 PM         

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there is a place
the memory of which
haunts my slumbering dream self
it's been long since a waking visit
what is written off as a world better left
to the whacko, loonies, crazies and druggies
best abandoned by those who would walk amongs the rest
seeming as one of the many
when truly this other place
this world rushing in your ears
screaming through your veins
stoking the fire of the flesh
is less the domain of madness
than the one purported to be the sanctuary of the sane

i cannot remain
the bubbling brook beckons to me
they have errected cold cutting wires
signs stating No Tresspassing! abound

yet the wire rusts and a sign has fallen
the sagging wire cannot truly bar my passage
the sign will sink into the ground, eaten by Her
the bubbling brook bordered by boulders
shall remain

there seems to be a place
so familiar it is as if i had left it only a moment ago
rocks arranged by the rushing water
seeming a seat made just for me to nestle perfectly among
i take my place here where i hoped for solitude
though instead i was reminded by magpie
that i am never truly alone
he watches as my tears mingle with the timeless flow

though i feel so far from that world of assfault and droning souls
not even the rushing water
can entirely wash away the sound of the passing somnambulists
sailing by just out of sight

funny how just being awake to the world
can activate your senses
in such a way that so frightens the sleepwalkers
they may try and lock you up
if they catch you
it's so important that you get your sleep, little girl

it's too late for me now
a tiny shiny little ball of black goo
found its way into my stomach
and now my feet have found their way
into the sweet soft cold caress of the lapping rapids
as they gurggle and burbble their way to distant shores of sea

i wonder if my tears travel so far as to one day mingle
with chalky grey remains of he who has gone ahead
beyond my reach
somewhere deep underwater
methinks they must
for that is what this crazy journey has shown me
no matter how alone i may wish to be at times
it is never so
all of creation forever surrounds me
envelops me
within and without
i breathe deep and in so doing
i am communed with all that breathes
and all that ever will breathe

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Posts: 19621
From: Columbus, GA USA
Registered: Nov 2000

posted November 17, 2004 02:13 PM         

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Wow! You should write more often!

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"Never mentally imagine for another that which you would not want to experience for yourself, since the mental image you send out inevitably comes back to you." Rebecca Clark

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Posts: 4887
From: Ontario, Canada
Registered: Aug 2003

posted November 17, 2004 03:26 PM         

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Wow, indeed!!!
Awesome! Awesome!
Imagery, movement, excellent use of timing and words. But more than that, it was a simply marvelous piece. (one that can't be broken down or analysed, it just is.)

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Posts: 3769
From: Vancouver USA
Registered: May 2004

posted November 17, 2004 03:52 PM         

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Indeed²

Wonderful, Harpyr

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Posts: 777
From: dreamland
Registered: Jan 2004

posted November 17, 2004 09:50 PM         

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Posts: 4887
From: Ontario, Canada
Registered: Aug 2003

posted November 18, 2004 12:57 AM         

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Read it again...

*jee-bus, Harpyr! You sure gottsa deep side to ya, now doncha. Yeee-Haw, That there's some geeee---oood shite!

*sorry, I don't know where the accent came from. But it is more challenging to read though, huh?

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Posts: 1730
From: sleepy Rocky Mountain village
Registered: Dec 2002

posted November 18, 2004 01:26 PM         

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aaww shuuucks.. ya'll are are too sweet. You sure know how to make a lady feel welcome 'round these here parts.

I know I should write more..I just have a hard time making myself sit down and do it when I feel the inspiration.. This kind of loving encouragement is very helpful in that regard.. Thanks everybody!

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Posts: 2733
From: the stars
Registered: Jun 2004

posted November 18, 2004 05:45 PM         

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Awesome Harpyr.

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