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Topic: Not A Lover's Song
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whiterabbit Knowflake Posts: 278 From: another time Registered: Aug 2004
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posted January 08, 2005 03:20 PM
a hand you hold like a lover's hand a mouth that kisses like a lover But he is not a lover! No, he is a man who came and went. And even as you clutch his coat even as you lie together long enough for flightless creatures to learn the trade long enough for dew and moss to meet You are not a lover, no you are the one who comes and goes In mornings of weeks that pass in the ways that dreams pass as you gathered your clothes and he closes the windows be careful, for you were never lovers you only came and went.IP: Logged |
whiterabbit Knowflake Posts: 278 From: another time Registered: Aug 2004
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posted January 08, 2005 03:21 PM
just wrote this for a lover who is not a lover.IP: Logged |
26taurus Moderator Posts: 4190 From: the stars Registered: Jun 2004
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posted January 08, 2005 05:20 PM
Okay, maybe you are my soulmate whiterabbit. *wink wink*That was beautifully written. I love this part: quote: In mornings of weeks that passes in the ways that dreams pass as you gathered your clothes and he closes the windows
...."the windows"........the eyes?..... I like it. Please, share more! IP: Logged |
26taurus Moderator Posts: 4190 From: the stars Registered: Jun 2004
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posted January 08, 2005 05:25 PM
This part too. quote: And even as you clutch his coat even as you lie together long enough for flightless creatures to learn the trade long enough for dew and moss to meet
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pixelpixie Moderator Posts: 5768 From: Ontario, Canada Registered: Aug 2003
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posted January 10, 2005 01:58 AM
The last line summed it up beautifully... "You only came and went." Great! IP: Logged |