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From: india
Registered: Dec 2004

posted April 22, 2005 02:53 PM         

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From: Ontario Canada
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posted April 22, 2005 03:34 PM         

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Passion. whoa.
Passion!
I passion.
Fabulous job with the passion. I was moved.

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From: ohio
Registered: Aug 2004

posted April 22, 2005 08:05 PM         

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I’m not your mom
will never be
this is all there is to you
but there’s more to me
What you give
is not what I need
it’s not a soul connection
of half and half
I shared our story my love
i don’t want a sequel
I walked out on you
because, you , my child,
are not my equal.

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This was brilliant! I love it muchly.

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From: London
Registered: Dec 2004

posted April 22, 2005 08:08 PM         

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An emotional rocket that fires away!!!
I loved the repetition and structure, hard heating, beautiful and very conveying.

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From: india
Registered: Dec 2004

posted April 23, 2005 03:18 AM         

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thanks pixie...I knew you would appreciate the 'passion' coz I have read your poetry and it totally reverberates with passion.

future_uncertain and dynamic, thanks for reading,this and the last one also.
I posted this one coz this is not fragile or delicate...
it's amazing how different people bring out such varied emotional responses,don't you think?

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posted April 28, 2005 04:47 AM         

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I love this

"Layers inside layers
inside layers
I’ve put away
those tears
that would tear
you if you knew them
If I let them flow
they would drown you
you tantrum thrower"

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From: Stafford, VA USA
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posted April 28, 2005 09:06 AM         

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posted April 29, 2005 03:27 AM         

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Wow. Beautifully done.

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