Posts: 889
From: Ontario Canada
Registered: Jun 2005

posted July 20, 2005 12:32 AM         

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Feels like my raincoat got caught in a flash flood
door jammed tightly on my hood strings
whiplash
carcrash
I need a happy ending
The sense of delusion quietly quit on me
subtle daily tragedies seem quite absurdly looming
appraising abrasion, singleminded glooming
suddenly completely
parts of me not neatly
fitting anymore
into brave little moors
around the water of my contentedness
the waves I ride right on the outside
Not a chance to hide
the swelling tide
or pretend I had a goofy pride
but you know, I am okay..
It is different than the other day
that other kind of feeling
the ominous keeling
of my belly
This is a waiting
a patient recreating
of the things I had been moved by
and the parts I'd rather have died
But this transition
this bewitching switching
of the mission
In my motion
has my emotions
swirling like the
usual mess
and I might have missed
the difference
if I'd not been aware
of the worst that I'd seen there...
the last time I had been there
Now I move this twitching step
to my own conquest
tiny footprints in the sand
*my ego HAD stayed where it landed*
so the steps are small
but right for the travails
I have known more open sails
to have been lost to the details
this grandeur pretends its smallness
the meek are not weak
they shine through the chaos
knowing the Tao
lies in the moving feet.

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Posts: 678
From: UK
Registered: Jan 2004

posted July 21, 2005 06:05 AM         

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Your thoughts flow completely naturally, PP - far beyond normal "cleverness"; you have something extra. Someday you will be great.

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Posts: 2360
From: Laaandon
Registered: Jul 2004

posted July 21, 2005 06:36 AM         

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What a cool description ariestiger - I agree - effortless pix

I don't stop here unless I have time to read through the poems/posts properly and this one is enchanting. I think it's the way you choose to write it too - yes it flows naturally.

I will pop back to read the others also.

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Posts: 889
From: Ontario Canada
Registered: Jun 2005

posted July 21, 2005 12:01 PM         

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awwwwwwwwwww....
thanks!!!!!
I hope someday I will be great!

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From: Stafford, VA USA
Registered: Feb 2005

posted July 21, 2005 12:39 PM         

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From: Just left of center
Registered: May 2004

posted July 23, 2005 02:41 PM         

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AAWWW Pix, you're already there, sweetie....already there.

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From: New England
Registered: Mar 2003

posted July 23, 2005 08:44 PM         

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you always know what the weather is doing. and which way the wind blows.

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From: Columbus, GA USA
Registered: Nov 2000

posted July 24, 2005 01:07 PM         

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"There is no use trying," said Alice; "one can't believe impossible things." "I dare say you haven't had much practice," said the Queen. "When I was your age, I always did it for half an hour a day. Why, sometimes I've believed as many as six impossible things before breakfast." Lewis Carroll

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