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posted April 18, 2011 12:22 AM            

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posted April 18, 2011 01:51 AM            

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Ahhh, we get a peek into that boiling cauldron of Plutonian passion! Well done!

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posted April 18, 2011 02:06 AM            

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Originally posted by Rogue Guru:
Ahhh, we get a peek into that boiling cauldron of Plutonian passion! Well done!

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Thanks, Rogue Guru

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posted April 19, 2011 04:41 AM            

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You're words contain feeling in them.It stirs emotion. Nice.

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posted April 19, 2011 10:51 AM            

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posted April 19, 2011 11:23 AM            

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Originally posted by charmainec:
You're words contain feeling in them.It stirs emotion. Nice.

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Well, I know it stirs dangerous emotion, because it's not pretty, per se. But, it's honest.

I'll probably work on the ending a bit more, because I didn't want the reader to miss the tad bit or more honesty at the end.

There's remorse there, and a feeling of loss and pointlessness... something to be said for a continued loss - something that doesn't get reconciled even if one lives to see their enemy fall.

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posted April 19, 2011 11:24 AM            

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Thanks, T.

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