posted December 04, 2012 05:02 AM            

I feel something breaking within,
please ask yourself is this living?

As I take your hand I hope you understand,
I promise I won't let you go, I want to let you know.

That I would give up my life to give you yours,
And I would give up my time to give you more,
And I would give up my soul just to make you whole,
And the secret thing is I would give you everything.

I see the sadness hidden behind your eyes,
all the sorrow and anguish you've held on to all your life.

I can see your heart is bruised and battered,
scar tissue lined with a million fractures.

As I take your hand I hope you understand,
I promise I won't let you go, I want to let you know.

That I would give up my life to give you yours,
And I would give up my time to give you more,
And I would give up my soul just to make you whole,
And the secret thing is I would give you everything.

Your laugh is tinged with fear that you might disappear,
I will always be here, always be near, be a helping hand, an earnest ear.

Like a glass that fractures I'm reminded,
the future has many paths it is not decided.

As I take your hand I hope you understand,
I promise I won't let you go I want to let you know.

That I would give up my life to give you yours,
And I would give up my time to give you more,
And I would give up my soul just to make you whole,
And it's no secret thing that I would give you everything.

So I take these pieces hold them up,
See them held together with only love.

I was once told that we were not born whole,
And so I searched the whole wide world.
To find a fracture to compliment my own.

Thank you for taking the time to read as always.

- Chris

posted December 04, 2012 07:30 AM            

Makes me feel young again, just reading it.

posted December 04, 2012 11:15 AM            

For a poem is but a song spoken, and a song is but a poem sung.

It's for the woman I love. =) Simple but true. I guess I'm not the stereotypical Gemini Moon. Non-expressive, Non-emotional, Non-feeling.

You are as young as you want to be, and don't let anyone else make you feel otherwise. I am most probably young in comparison to the majority of people here I imagine.

Thank you again Faith.

posted December 13, 2012 03:02 PM            

quote:

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Originally posted by Swift Freeze
They're originally written as songs,
but the only difference between poetry and songs
is metre and melody.

For a poem is but a song spoken,
and a song is but a poem sung.

It's for the woman I love. =) Simple but true.
I guess I'm not the stereotypical Gemini Moon.
Non-expressive, Non-emotional, Non-feeling.

You are as young as you want to be,
and don't let anyone else make you feel otherwise.
I am most probably young
in comparison to the majority of people here
I imagine.

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quote:

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Originally posted by Swift Freeze:
They're originally written as songs, but the only difference between poetry and songs is metre and melody.

For a poem is but a song spoken, and a song is but a poem sung.

It's for the woman I love. =) Simple but true. I guess I'm not the stereotypical Gemini Moon. Non-expressive, Non-emotional, Non-feeling.

You are as young as you want to be, and don't let anyone else make you feel otherwise. I am most probably young in comparison to the majority of people here I imagine.

Thank you again Faith.

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posted January 09, 2013 05:19 AM            

quote:

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Originally posted by Brennie369:
I would only add that another difference between song and poem is the repetition of verse in song lyrics. Kinda throws one off in a poem - I think the poem would be more impacftul without the verse repetition. On another note, I see poetry in the way you wrote your response to Faith as well! See it below, moving lines down the only editing:

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I see,
I understand,
I thank.

Thank you for your kind words, and thank you for your wisdom. You must be a wonderful writer with such knowledge. =)

- Chris

posted January 09, 2013 11:32 PM            

added 2013jan10 12:20pm EST . . .

Reminds me of this song... Maybe seems unrelated? but the mood is nostalgic for me today... "Literally" the truth, as the Sun transits my asteroid 3162 NOSTALGIA rx... (sigh)-- to be soon followed by Mercury, Moon, and Venus through Capricorn. Stellar days for sure! Anyway, fits for me, and I share these with you...

Dusty Springfield - The Look of Love (1967) [4:09] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a28kY1-s-Vc

Traces of Love (ClassicsIV-DennisYost) [2:46] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V0r74rxvWxo

posted January 16, 2013 09:44 AM            

quote:

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Originally posted by mirage29:
love, in bits and pieces...

added 2013jan10 12:20pm EST . . .

Reminds me of this song... Maybe seems unrelated? but the mood is nostalgic for me today... "Literally" the truth, as the Sun transits my asteroid 3162 NOSTALGIA rx... (sigh)-- to be soon followed by Mercury, Moon, and Venus through Capricorn. Stellar days for sure! Anyway, fits for me, and I share these with you...

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I'm not sure I understand your opening words...? It seems like you are you referencing the traces of love song? Or are you commenting on something within the thread?

Things like poetry, and music, are extremely subjective. If you see and build a relationship between two things, then there is a relationship between two things. Many partners for example have shared songs, or favourite dishes etc. that remind them of each other.

I really like Dusty Springfield - The Look of Love, it is a beautiful song. I can, identify with the words and imagery very much. I have Venus Conjunct Pluto, Eros, and other love asteroids in Scorpio. I must admit that my words probably paint quite a... dramatic picture, but I feel like they barely come close to how I feel. So thank you very much for sharing those two songs =).

Can I ask what the nostalgia asteroid does? Does its' transits have you think back on... certain things related to the planets and houses it is passing through?

I like your user name, a mirage is that which me most desperately wish to see, but is often what we fool ourselves into believing is true.

- Chris

posted January 16, 2013 06:12 PM            

meanings

Your first stanza--

quote:

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"The mirror falls & fractures as it hits the ground,
I hang it up a thousand me-s all staring back without a sound."

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posted January 16, 2013 06:52 PM            

The Oxford American Pocket Dictionary (1980 Oxford University Press) defines mirage as "an optical illusion caused by atmospheric conditions, especially making sheets of water seem to appear in a desert or on a hot road." p.567.

Sheets of water in a desert... or on a hot road. Perhaps this is what keeps me going. The 'hope' ahead of me. An event or object that IS real in the world, but it's not really there for me. Anomaly. Can't find it. Keep self alive knowing that it DOES exist, somewhere...

Word illusion is "something that a person wrongly supposes to exist; false belief about the nature of something." p.436.

Maybe that 'hope' I move towards doesn't exist at all. . .

posted January 16, 2013 08:21 PM            

Oxford Dictionary^^ defines nostalgia as "sentimental [emotion, not logical; romantic] memory of or longing for things of the past" p.609.

posted January 17, 2013 09:18 AM            

You should let nothing hold you back from doing what you want to. It is no ones' place but your own to decide if you want to succeed or not, to shine or not. Now matter how far your Sun has traveled it is never too late to let it shine.

- Chris