posted September 24, 2013 01:43 AM            

Unprompted words, you say to me
Just what I was looking for
My heart, it comes alive again
With every move you make
Slowly I start breathing in
Every breath you take

Would you come for me?
Would you come for me?
Don't know how much longer I can wait

My skin is on fire
Every touch fueling the flames higher
Your response, it pulls me in
And your arms make their claim
Now movement in my hips begin
And you don't hesitate

Would you come for me?
Would you come for me?
Don't know how much longer I can wait

Our eyes meet and we begin
I feel you sliding in
It feels like silk runs up my spine
And my legs start to shake

And I can hear the sounds you make
Escaping from your lips
So I rest mine, right between
Like they were made to fit

Would you come for me?
Please tell me that you'll come for me
Don't know how much longer I can wait

The pace is getting faster now
Our pulse, it runs the same
My chest can't help but rise and fall
And I whisper your name

I just can't keep it in
Then every thought escapes my head
Tightly embraced
Together, we release

Now I know you would come for me
I know that you would come for me
And you were worth the wait

posted September 24, 2013 04:40 AM            

Thank you.

posted September 24, 2013 08:47 PM            

Writing seems more "pornographic" somehow

So! In a PRIVATE & personal setting this is gorgeous!!

posted September 24, 2013 11:29 PM            

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Originally posted by mirage29:
:...this writing IS very beautiful-- not discounting that at all.... BUT somehow it crosses a Boundary here at LL. I like it 'personally', but feels sorta 'inappropriate' here maybe? IMO ---

Writing seems more "pornographic" somehow

So! In a PRIVATE & personal setting this is gorgeous!!

But for LL yellowwax~~~~ WATCH OUT... too "porny"

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I'm so sorry....I thought about that for a minute but hoped no one would be offended. It really is a deep expression of a very deep and meaningful connection not just "sex" porn. It is descriptive, yes. But there are two angles to this....certain lines automatically make one think "physical" but I tried very hard to express the soulful aspect as well. I hoped people would catch my last line "finally, you came to me". And wonder why I had changed the wording in the last line. Because it has a different meaning....this is something she had been waiting for her whole life...she waited for him and the connection was powerful. The line "will you come for me?" Is more about him coming to rescue her...she has been waiting for him to rescue her emotionally and physically. It is erotic, yes, but I tried very very hard to portray not just the eroticism of the picture it writes but also the emotional connection, the need and desire for him more than just physically, and a beautiful account of love...the first time she had ever truly made love to anyone. I wanted people to feel the emotions I felt when writing it but I was prepared that it would mainly be seen as sex and nothing more. I do appreciate the feedback. Thank you all!

posted September 25, 2013 03:57 AM            

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original quote by proudLeo: I'm so sorry....I thought about that for a minute but hoped no one would be offended. It really is a deep expression of a very deep and meaningful connection not just "sex" porn. It is descriptive, yes. But there are two angles to this....certain lines automatically make one think "physical" but I tried very hard to express the soulful aspect as well. I hoped people would catch my last line "finally, you came to me". And wonder why I had changed the wording in the last line. Because it has a different meaning....this is something she had been waiting for her whole life...she waited for him and the connection was powerful. The line "will you come for me?" Is more about him coming to rescue her...she has been waiting for him to rescue her emotionally and physically. It is erotic, yes, but I tried very very hard to portray not just the eroticism of the picture it writes but also the emotional connection, the need and desire for him more than just physically, and a beautiful account of love...the first time she had ever truly made love to anyone. I wanted people to feel the emotions I felt when writing it but I was prepared that it would mainly be seen as sex and nothing more. I do appreciate the feedback. Thank you all!

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proudLeo... Sensitive beautiful poem, and sensitive remark... How lovely.

Thankyou for explaining the sensuality... I appreciate Beauty and Merging.

Again, we live in the reality of dirty sex offenders.... And we have teenagers who come post here at LL Yellow Wax.

Although I know that our teens feel they are more 'mature' than most, and perhaps they have had their own difficult experiences, I just feel 'uncomfortable' about the porn-potential of this piece.

I believe LL draws a line and enforces it here.... hard-core, and overly explicit sex is out of boundaries.

Some LL Users have asked for a Forum where they can be MORE explicit. Try using "SWEET PEAS"-- They allows people to discuss sexual behaviors and attitudes there.

proudLeo, You could ASK RANDALL his opinion?

posted September 25, 2013 04:07 AM            

Personally it doesn't offend my sensibilities, however, I can understand how it may for others. I will never discourage anyone from sharing something artistic and creative, partly because I experienced such discouragement when I was younger.

I'm sorry that you feel this may be too much for some users. Out of curiosity, I imagine my piece titled: What You Did, would also fall into the same category?

Please continue to share here ProudLeo.

- Chris

posted September 25, 2013 04:16 AM            

Pearlty also writes some exquisite 'body' and 'sensual' pieces..... and I didn't get the sense of her crossing 'that certain line' in hers either. It was fine!

Taureau20 .... Randall gave HIM strong warnings, a few times! I remember that. I believe Taureau20 took those down himself.

Proud Leo.... great writing. I'd LOVE to see other things you wrote! You have a keen touch with the heart and senses... with sensitivity to others (your friend).

(soooooo sorry, I can barely keep my eyes focused... googly-eyes, haha. Gotta go to bed right now. Hope to see you all tomorrow? or soon!)

posted September 25, 2013 10:36 PM            

! Proud Leo....

Title?: "My Desiring's Fulfilled" ...... ?[/QUOTE

I like it!