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Topic: A Greeting
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Ayelet
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 02:13 PM
  
Hello.This poem is called "A Greeting".
It may be simple, but i don't usually write in English. so there:Loss of freedom
Loss of attachment
Fate
And in my dream, a strange face
Yet so familiar, I
Recognise myself
in another's passion
and am left alone Who's there at the door?
A friend, they say,
but do they know?
I seem to pass away by a kiss blown
through the backyard of my life
Left without words, right where
I left you
And don't I deserve your proof?
Isn't that exactly what you said
when I refused to see you,
refused to even say
one word that would have freed us both?
Hello
This is it. Have a wonderful day.
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Cancer/Scorpio729
Moderator Posts: 2213
From: 6,000 feet above sea level
Registered: Feb 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 03:42 PM
Lovely 
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Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 315
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 06:37 PM
Thank you! I write in Hebrew.IP: Logged |
Swift Freeze
Moderator Posts: 622
From: One World
Registered: Nov 2009
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posted June 09, 2014 07:07 AM
I love the word choice and structure. Thank you for sharing.------------------
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Pearlty
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From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted June 09, 2014 09:30 AM
Very nicely written poem..flows wonderfully.  IP: Logged |
Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 315
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 10, 2014 04:24 AM
Thank you Swift Freeze and Pealtry!IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 2745
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted June 10, 2014 02:14 PM
Ayelet! Your poem is wonderful...  Hello to you, Ayelet! from another distant part of this geographic world we live in, I say to you, "Hello"...  (music) Hello (Neil Diamond) [3:27] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K0MIKngHn_c IP: Logged |
Ayelet
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 10, 2014 03:10 PM
Thank you for your greeting, Mirage... It is nice to make that distance and be welcomed... see you IP: Logged |
mirage29
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Registered: May 2012
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posted July 09, 2014 02:07 AM
*bump* ... IP: Logged |
Randall
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From: Saturn next to Charmainec
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 10, 2014 02:10 PM
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