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Topic: Snow
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Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 335 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 10, 2014 04:18 PM
Snow goes without saying Snapping at your tongue with a swiftness so sudden And I remember What a display of coldness I have witnessed in your sweet yet foreign disarray of manners Bordering on madness I can still feel your pain, as acute as mine You are living again, revolving in fear Around my absence And love is still as near Yet love is still as near
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Pearlty Moderator Posts: 671 From: Ohio Registered: Jan 2012
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posted June 11, 2014 08:13 PM
Your poem delves toward raw feelings which speaks volumes..I liked the short form simplicity yet in meaning the emotional complexity.. IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 335 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 11, 2014 09:56 PM
Thank you for your readingIP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 12, 2014 12:28 PM
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 13, 2014 12:31 PM
Love the imagery. IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 335 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 13, 2014 06:33 PM
Thanks Randall!IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 14, 2014 06:57 AM
You're welcome.IP: Logged |
Pearlty Moderator Posts: 671 From: Ohio Registered: Jan 2012
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posted June 17, 2014 07:05 PM
Had to come back and read this over again, I love this. Reminds me of heartfelt Yeats poetry, yet modernly flared. IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 21, 2014 11:06 AM
Missing the cold air right about now!IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 22, 2014 02:11 PM
High 90s here.IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 23, 2014 02:26 PM
Yes, modernly flared.IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 2794 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted July 08, 2014 10:01 PM
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 43259 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted August 01, 2014 12:18 PM
More!IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 2794 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted August 03, 2014 06:53 PM
Such a passionate, strong, mature romantic sense about this poem, Ayelet... I can imagine it! IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 335 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted August 05, 2014 10:31 PM
Thank you so much Mirage!IP: Logged |