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Topic: A prayer
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Ayelet
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted December 01, 2014 09:38 PM
  
If one knew one's worth,
If one worked with eyes open,
If the salty waters knew one's sorrow
there would be no need for prayers no more.Since I do not know all that,
I allow myself to write,
As if a word mattered in the world. It is just another prayer
on an empty page. IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 3100
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Registered: May 2012
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posted December 02, 2014 02:34 AM
Love the stages and layers in this... Words seen, noted, and pondered for more than an hour! Puzzle in your words turn my head around. I've enjoyed that.Invisible prayer, wondering-page Space-holding.  IP: Logged |
Iced8Ace
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From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted December 02, 2014 06:43 PM
Very deep and beautiful. When I read the end, I reflected on the idea that what if the bible or any other religious scripture is a prayer for what a deity wishes for and that's why we have free will? Your poems are always very insightful, I really enjoy them Ayelet.  IP: Logged |
Pearlty
Moderator Posts: 818
From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted December 03, 2014 11:36 AM
This poem kind of reminds me- instead of wearing an anchor on one's sleeve let the heart be there in deep meaning and thought naturally flowing...which this tender reflection shows. IP: Logged |
Ayelet
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posted December 03, 2014 04:00 PM
Thank you Mirage, Iced8Ace and Pearlty for your kind responses.IP: Logged |
thequeen
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Registered: Sep 2014
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posted December 04, 2014 12:49 AM
Even though these are very few words,
I felt the essence of each of them individually.
Words straight from heart..IP: Logged |
Swift Freeze
Moderator Posts: 687
From: One World
Registered: Nov 2009
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posted December 04, 2014 05:27 AM
Beautiful, yet sorrowful.Thank you for sharing. ------------------
Learn lots. Don't judge. Laugh for no reason. Be nice. Seek Happiness. Follow your dreams. IP: Logged |
Ayelet
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posted December 05, 2014 04:35 PM
Thank you thequeen and Deep Freeze IP: Logged |
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