Author
|
Topic: Let it rain
|
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 611 From: Registered: Sep 2010
|
posted December 23, 2014 06:18 PM
Let It RainI don't care if it will rain, I will come back to you. And all your pains will be mine again, and all your happiness too. 'Cause there's no jazz without our love, There's plainly no music at all. Just screaming of an iron maid, and a washing machine turned on. It's the squeaking of your metal nerves and a yawn of mine from a distance, and there is no religion that separated it shall fit us. Why are you so stubborn, make me go for you all this way? I guess I left you when you were close, too close for me to stay. IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 3171 From: us Registered: May 2012
|
posted December 24, 2014 12:43 AM
The mix is interesting ...curious.IP: Logged |
PisceanDream unregistered
|
posted December 24, 2014 07:46 AM
I love how you rhymed with syllables that sounded similar, and you pulled it off quite nicely. Lovely! IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 611 From: Registered: Sep 2010
|
posted December 24, 2014 02:19 PM
Thank you Mirage and PisceanDream!IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 48434 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
|
posted December 28, 2014 09:24 AM
Good stuff.IP: Logged |
Pearlty Moderator Posts: 833 From: Ohio Registered: Jan 2012
|
posted December 29, 2014 07:51 PM
I'm a little clumsy with response lately- just getting over being sick; but I really like this it was interesting to read over and decipher. IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 611 From: Registered: Sep 2010
|
posted December 30, 2014 04:52 PM
Thank you Pearlty, I hope you feel much better.IP: Logged |
Sailor Gemini Knowflake Posts: 717 From: Magellan Castle, Venus Registered: Mar 2013
|
posted December 30, 2014 09:41 PM
This is pretty good. I really feel like this could be a song.------------------ I call the planets by their Greek names. Now please stop asking which asteroids I'm using? ^-^' -La Sorcière du Temps IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 611 From: Registered: Sep 2010
|
posted December 31, 2014 06:00 AM
Thank oyu Sailor Gemini. Yes, I often feel or hear inside music when I write.IP: Logged |