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Topic: Some words in the middle in the night.
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LF DX
Knowflake Posts: 50
From: Paraguay
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted May 17, 2015 02:00 AM
  
This came in just a moment of inspiration, I needed to express it.
Well the crystalline waters they flow endlessly now
They've been stucked in mud and many wooden boards
Broken by a godsend blow
It's time to make the river flowDon't make me remember the times of the waste
Of many litres of water being covered with the filth
Of sins and degradation of broken soldiers and their fate
By their deaths of drowning in hate and sorrow The dawn comes in the south of the Missouri
And I'm complete once again
I can be whoever I can be
There's nothing more to gained or to be in vain And I'm free once again. IP: Logged |
Pearlty
Moderator Posts: 998
From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted May 17, 2015 12:47 PM
Packed with meaning! Very nice  IP: Logged |
Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 910
From:
Registered: Sep 2010
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posted May 18, 2015 11:24 AM
The imagery of the soldiers to the river is very vivid. Free spirited, strong.IP: Logged |
thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 1215
From: Al Da Beatz
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted May 19, 2015 05:28 PM
This is a connected poem, you've written it very vividly. Imagery can be seen  IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 3743
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted May 19, 2015 06:31 PM
The ship might have broken into pieces, but the life of the swimmer was saved, nonetheless. Loved it.  IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 54293
From: Saturn next to Charmaine
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted June 26, 2015 03:07 PM
Me, too.IP: Logged |
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