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Topic: Tell Me
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thequeen Knowflake Posts: 2228 From: India Registered: Sep 2014
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posted December 30, 2015 02:14 PM
Tell Me,Making me feel bad, Does it make you feel good?, Going around in circles, Walking where instead I should, Deceiving me to the core, And distantly smiling, Where you hold your fist, With your anger boiling, Why are you so far away, When I am standing so close, I gave you love, Why this hatred you chose, Punching the wall, Till your hands bleed out, Holding me in your anger, Till I speak my whereabout, I wish you gave me, What i gave you, My heart, soul and my lonely truth, I'll see you walk by, Till you return tonight, You can't live as I cant, Burning in this fight… IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 1234 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted December 30, 2015 03:03 PM
This one sounds like a love rap poem. You assert yourself confronting your love. And even though there is a bitter tone to this poem, it cannot end quite yet, or it is more or less eternal, since he keeps coming back. IP: Logged |
thequeen Knowflake Posts: 2228 From: India Registered: Sep 2014
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posted December 30, 2015 03:09 PM
Lol. Now that I read it appears to be a rap. Good one Ayelet and thanks for reading. Maybe there is a little Eminem in me lol.IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 4620 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted December 30, 2015 07:58 PM
I read it, and you know how I tend to spiritualize each poem. I love your work.For me tonight, at first it evoked a sense of rejection and cruelty. There's the ever-living sadness and suffering that comes from feeling stuck-and-alive, in a world with little or no sense of pleasure from living. Only the constant pressing, pressing. Persisting. And yet, there's also a whiff of something deliciously provocative. It comes to ME... and Is NOT dangerous, but the wrestling of a fulfillment of desire. [And humorously, for everybody's sake, we call out 'crop-failure' to words spoken that want to manifest OUT of sync. I call CANCEL-CANCEL-CANCEL to any kind of negative energies surrounding anybody's situation right now. Only Safety, Peace, and Pleasant moments and dreams come to you now.] So anyways.... And OF COURSE, things come to me in songs. This may be way-far from your usual (and my usual) musical selection. But this is the one I have as a sense tonight. It can be applied 'spiritually' OR 'romantically'.... But I DO always feel that there is romance in the center of one who hears, seeks, and follows Spirit. Like Kriyananda's Flute-poem describes. (My other posts.) Your Call, I can't resist! (music) Lead Me On (Conway Twitty, Loretta Lynn) [2:30] *(see note below) IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 4620 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted December 30, 2015 08:12 PM
(Just saying, there's something creepish~weird in the cosmic-vibe right now. The above was NOT an 'invitation' ... ewww. I think I'll take that url down for tonight and right now. ~sorry)IP: Logged |
thequeen Knowflake Posts: 2228 From: India Registered: Sep 2014
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posted December 31, 2015 05:57 AM
Thank you for reading mirage and your valuable input. There seems something strong and provocative about the way you analysed my poetry. I liked especially your short prayer for everyone. Never-mind you taking down the song, anything negative isn't welcome right IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 4620 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted December 31, 2015 08:18 PM
^ That's right.... So Much Love to you T.Q. I've enjoyed your work sooo much. Thank you for sharing your life with us. Have A Happy and Prosperous New Year 2016 IP: Logged |
thequeen Knowflake Posts: 2228 From: India Registered: Sep 2014
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posted January 02, 2016 11:57 AM
quote: Originally posted by mirage29: ^ That's right.... So Much Love to you T.Q. I've enjoyed your work sooo much. Thank you for sharing your life with us. Have A Happy and Prosperous New Year 2016
Same to you mirage Have a blast in New Year IP: Logged |
Pearlty Moderator Posts: 1214 From: Ohio Registered: Jan 2012
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posted January 02, 2016 02:25 PM
Touchingly melancholy, yet such a keen sense of honesty in feeling. IP: Logged | |