posted July 19, 2016 12:21 AM            

What was I looking?
When I’ve hold your hand
It wasn’t out of reason
When I entered your mind
And the souls were naked
No holds barred
What was I looking?
I wanted the flying star

What you were looking?
When you allowed the kiss
Do you know the boundaries?
The ones we crossed
And when the night was rainy
I remember the moans
What was I looking?
It turned into a song

Bridge 1

What we were looking?
It may not be the same
Have we played fairly?
This careless game
Have we put many fences?
Many impossible things
And all of the promises
Do you care what they mean?

What was I looking?
When I entered your door
Maybe some wisdom
Maybe something more
But am I the right one?
Who can use the key?
What you are looking?
To love or to flee

I know what I’m looking
It may have a price
The wheels are burning
It’s an animal vice
I can’t hold it my friend
Call me slow if you want
But when we went to sleep
Do you know what it meant?

What you were looking
Spontaneous it was
But the fast transmission
Contagious it is
It’s now a disease
That won’t let me be
What am I looking?
That you can set me free

posted July 21, 2016 05:05 PM            

Those sorts of phrases (in English) would attach the word 'at' behind the word 'looking' .... "What am I looking at?" "What were you looking at" ... Or, the word 'for' such as "What am I looking for?" "What were you looking for?"

ref 'Or can I still put a fight?' ...
This would become "Or can I still fight?"
.... "Or can I still put up a fight?"

ref .. When I’ve hold your hand
... "When I've held your hand" "When I hold your hand"

ref ..
When I was in your sight
Is the spark already over?

"When I was in your sight
Was the spark already over?"

My OWN grammar and punctuation contain many many errors in writing usually, LFDX. So I apologize for trying to point out possible mistakes? I'm actually not being overly critical of your work-- you know I'm a Fan! ... Just, some of your ending punctuations (question marks) 'seem' to be misplaced? ... You usually don't do that.... Your work always seems very polished, and this one is not (as much). *Heart*

Something else really cool that I noticed visually is the length of phrases and the way they appear laid out in even lines, with the blanks in-between... If you squint your eyes and see the whole post, it "looks" like an artistic rendering of the long neck of a guitar. You can see the frets!
... Where you have the words 'Bridge 1' is where you would fasten that special clip/fastening device that acts to alter the pitch of the strings before you'd play a song?
(sorry, don't know the technical term for it)

posted July 22, 2016 03:07 PM            

I've been carried out by emotions lately, but things are going great, my love life's great, me and the virgo woman went a step forward with our relationship, yesterday we had a great time and I played to her one of my songs to her, and she did like it, she showed affection torwards me in public for the first time and when we said goodbbye said "I love you", Te quiero in spanish", which isn't as "Te Amo" which is more deeper, but for how things are, it's a great leap.