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Topic: A Big, Restrained Grin
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PlutoSquared Moderator Posts: 4362 From: Mars Registered: Aug 2010
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posted April 18, 2011 12:22 AM
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Rogue Guru Knowflake Posts: 154 From: Pleasantville, State of Euphoria, USA Registered: Jan 2011
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posted April 18, 2011 01:51 AM
Ahhh, we get a peek into that boiling cauldron of Plutonian passion! Well done!IP: Logged |
PlutoSquared Moderator Posts: 4362 From: Mars Registered: Aug 2010
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posted April 18, 2011 02:06 AM
quote: Originally posted by Rogue Guru: Ahhh, we get a peek into that boiling cauldron of Plutonian passion! Well done!
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charmainec Moderator Posts: 2409 From: on the other side of the rainbow Registered: Apr 2009
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posted April 19, 2011 04:41 AM
You're words contain feeling in them.It stirs emotion. Nice.IP: Logged |
T Knowflake Posts: 3518 From: Registered: Apr 2009
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posted April 19, 2011 10:51 AM
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PlutoSquared Moderator Posts: 4362 From: Mars Registered: Aug 2010
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posted April 19, 2011 11:23 AM
quote: Originally posted by charmainec: You're words contain feeling in them.It stirs emotion. Nice.
Well, I know it stirs dangerous emotion, because it's not pretty, per se. But, it's honest. I'll probably work on the ending a bit more, because I didn't want the reader to miss the tad bit or more honesty at the end. There's remorse there, and a feeling of loss and pointlessness... something to be said for a continued loss - something that doesn't get reconciled even if one lives to see their enemy fall. IP: Logged |
PlutoSquared Moderator Posts: 4362 From: Mars Registered: Aug 2010
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posted April 19, 2011 11:24 AM
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