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Topic: A Greeting
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Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 315 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 02:13 PM
Hello.This poem is called "A Greeting". It may be simple, but i don't usually write in English. so there:Loss of freedom Loss of attachment Fate And in my dream, a strange face Yet so familiar, I Recognise myself in another's passion and am left alone Who's there at the door? A friend, they say, but do they know? I seem to pass away by a kiss blown through the backyard of my life Left without words, right where I left you And don't I deserve your proof? Isn't that exactly what you said when I refused to see you, refused to even say one word that would have freed us both? Hello This is it. Have a wonderful day.
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Cancer/Scorpio729 Moderator Posts: 2213 From: 6,000 feet above sea level Registered: Feb 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 03:42 PM
Lovely What language do you usually write in?IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 315 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 08, 2014 06:37 PM
Thank you! I write in Hebrew.IP: Logged |
Swift Freeze Moderator Posts: 622 From: One World Registered: Nov 2009
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posted June 09, 2014 07:07 AM
I love the word choice and structure. Thank you for sharing.------------------ Learn lots. Don't judge. Laugh for no reason. Be nice. Seek Happiness. Follow your dreams. IP: Logged |
Pearlty Moderator Posts: 655 From: Ohio Registered: Jan 2012
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posted June 09, 2014 09:30 AM
Very nicely written poem..flows wonderfully. IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 315 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 10, 2014 04:24 AM
Thank you Swift Freeze and Pealtry!IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 2745 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted June 10, 2014 02:14 PM
Ayelet! Your poem is wonderful... Hello to you, Ayelet! from another distant part of this geographic world we live in, I say to you, "Hello"... (music) Hello (Neil Diamond) [3:27] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K0MIKngHn_c IP: Logged |
Ayelet Knowflake Posts: 315 From: Registered: Sep 2010
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posted June 10, 2014 03:10 PM
Thank you for your greeting, Mirage... It is nice to make that distance and be welcomed... see you IP: Logged |
mirage29 Knowflake Posts: 2745 From: us Registered: May 2012
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posted July 09, 2014 02:07 AM
*bump* ... IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 42435 From: Saturn next to Charmainec Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 10, 2014 02:10 PM
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