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Aphrodite
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posted November 21, 2002 11:08 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Aphrodite     Edit/Delete Message
"Vivid."

I was 20 years old and living in a new city in the Fall. James was in his senior year at the Academy of Art, studying film. He had just finished directing a documentary on AIDS. We agreed to meet at the movie theater 1000 Van Ness at 7:00 pm . . . I arrived 1/2 an hour late. I was stepping out of the bus and he stood in front of the doors. He was about to get on the bus to leave and thought I was not showing up.

I apologized for my naivity for not knowing the city bus schedules. He answered, "Make sure you have a student ID to pay for your ticket stub. Prices are 1/2 off."

Arlington Road was a dry and dull film, I had fallen asleep mid-way.

After which, we walked to Tommy's Joint for dinner. An Aries man, he opened the door to let himself in, whilst letting the door slam in my face behind.

Naturally, I was very curious for the roots of his rudeness. Anyone else would have left. I politely stayed, entirely focused on knowing what exactly was his Achilles heel. Paying for my own ticket stub and dinner was a small price for what I was planning to probe insight from.

James talked, gossiped, and bragged about his greatness. I smiled inside, how anyone could think foolishness as a good facade for loneliness.

We made our way to Grace Cathedral. A beautiful church nestled on Nob Hill across from the Crocker Mansion. There is a children's park in between, and we sat on the swings staring at the stars that we would never be able to touch.

James talked about his last girlfriend, Miyako. He said he grew bored of her, and said he was not married to her---so his commitment waned.

"There was no ring on my finger, to keep me there."

He grew bored of himself. A coward for blaming a woman, for his lack of amusement.

I grew bored of him, for my lack of amusement.

A confession of denial . . . was worth the price of a bad movie and a turkey dinner.

A wish Miyako may never hear manifested, into her little ear.

by Aphrodite Sky

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theFajita
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posted November 21, 2002 08:43 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for theFajita     Edit/Delete Message
I loved it! Fact or fiction-- it was great!

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Food is the only art that nourishes!

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laraina
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posted November 21, 2002 11:08 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for laraina     Edit/Delete Message
I agree. That was great!!

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myaxlrose
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posted November 22, 2002 12:40 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for myaxlrose     Edit/Delete Message
Great piece, Aphrodite.

Is this part of any novel you are writing or a short story collection?

love and peace,
myaxlrose

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Worldly Man's Advocate
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posted November 22, 2002 01:35 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Worldly Man's Advocate     Edit/Delete Message
Yeah, it really gripped me! What I especially like is the cross-over between relating what was happening and what you were thinking - it's mixed together, and blend is very pleasing.

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Aphrodite
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posted November 22, 2002 09:18 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for Aphrodite     Edit/Delete Message
hi everyone,

thanks for the feedback

it's not part of a novel, or a collection of short-stories . . . though i am thinking i should start putting the pieces together one of these days.

the date with James is a true story.

i would love to read other short-stories if anyone feels inclined share. everyone is welcome post them here, and even on this thread too.

aphrodite

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