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Topic: Seperation
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Sheaa Olein
Moderator Posts: 2610
From: London
Registered: Jul 2004
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posted December 29, 2004 05:19 PM
 
Extract written by me on 11/10/02;Seperation I don't wanna fight anymore
Understanding's killing me inside,
Don't always wanna see too much
Wish my feelings would subside. Yet another chapter opens
In this poetry in motion,
I know this time is different
'cos now I deal with the commotion. Like seeing through the tears -
They wash over the pain,
Like salt in the wound -
You'll never do that again. People think I'm an adult
But am only a child,
I hurt like one too -
'Why's your persona so mild?' I've done a 180
And hit a home run,
People still tend to think
I'm nothing but fun. I've chosen a way
To take me back home -
'Did she throw the dice..
Or the domino?' Decifer support and unconditional,
When you work out the answer
Then inside
It's official. I think it was the years
That scared the change
You would not lose,
And betrayed your own game. Look back on ups and downs
And see what you saw..
Another child's game,
For that's what you are. 
Picture by Seth Garland 'Diminishing Seconds' IP: Logged |
pixelpixie
Moderator Posts: 2895
From: Ontario Canada
Registered: Jun 2005
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posted December 29, 2004 08:35 PM
I like the way you play with your words.
Writing about being like children...see saw. I love that. Lotsa hidden gems to see. Can't wait to tackle the sandbox more.  IP: Logged |
sweetlibra
Knowflake Posts: 951
From:
Registered: Oct 2004
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posted December 30, 2004 08:11 AM
Yet another chapter opens
In this poetry in motion,
Poetry in motion.. my heart is jumping 
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Sheaa Olein
Moderator Posts: 2610
From: London
Registered: Jul 2004
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posted December 30, 2004 08:28 AM
sweetlibra ~  *edit* Thanks so much Pix, I came back to this thread in 2006 to reread this poem and saw I didn;t reply to you. Must have not seen it or something. Anyway, much appreciated, I'm glad you picked up on the play on words  IP: Logged |
26taurus
Knowflake Posts: 9778
From: the stars
Registered: Jun 2004
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posted December 30, 2004 10:03 AM
Wow Karen. You express your feelings beautifully through words. Such depth.....  ...very talented you are.IP: Logged |
whiterabbit
Knowflake Posts: 1110
From: The Future
Registered: Aug 2004
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posted December 30, 2004 04:29 PM
I can imagine this one as a song, it would work well with music, I think.IP: Logged |
Sheaa Olein
Moderator Posts: 2610
From: London
Registered: Jul 2004
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posted December 31, 2004 05:39 AM
Thank you 26, really whiterabbit ~ thank you for the feedback. I wrote these extracts kind of quickly, literally in about 4/5 mins and thought best not to adjust them. Some of them have a feel of 'rap poetry', since they were written in that style. Basically, it's what came from that time and might try it as a song. My cousin, HoneyBee studies music and has mentioned this as well. Love to you,
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26taurus
Knowflake Posts: 9778
From: the stars
Registered: Jun 2004
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posted January 12, 2005 09:09 PM
Ahhhh yes. This one. Beautiful. quote:
Yet another chapter opens
In this poetry in motion,Look back on ups and downs
And see what you saw..
Another child's game,
For that's what you are.
"True love is like ghosts, which everybody talks about and few have seen."
-La Rochefoucauld "Love is but the discovery of ourselves in others, and the delight in the recognition."
-Alexander Smith Talk to you soon.
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NeoKitty
Knowflake Posts: 595
From: Heaven
Registered: Dec 2004
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posted January 13, 2005 10:36 PM
 Yes beautiful... ------------------
"And dreams, don't ever forget, are the first step in manifesting wishes into reality"-- Linda Goodman's Star Signs IP: Logged |
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