posted October 13, 2007 02:32 AM         

It's the moments that keeps killing
Or it's those seconds that keep haunting
The sweet memories of the spring
Or it's the fragrance left by the summers

Every second refuses to pass away
Every moment of wait refuses to fade away
I can't wait for the sun, said the little tree
Of fear that it's dying inside

Thou we shall wait
Said the tree which can't hide its surprise
Life can never be without those moments
Where different minds can go against

And the tree went on
Thou you all shall listen
It's the time that needs to pass
It's the wait we have to accept

For the sun not to be blamed
It was nothing but sweet when it was there
Thou we cant be selfish
Asking the beautiful rays to stay with us

Thou we shall not
Speak a word of wrong when he is there for us
Thou we cannot
Think a moment of wrong when he can't be with us

Thou it's not a mistake
To wish that he can be here all the time
Truth is what we need to accept
That he has to go around to come back.

It's the faith
That kept the trees from falling apart
Or it's their belief
That the sunshine will come back one day

Let the God's bless them
For all the good they did
Let the sun shine on thy souls
For all the wait they endured

For they never knew
How far the axes where away
Nor they had the tiniest idea
That they can be flooded from the face of the earth

That they may never see the sun again
Who Knows?
It's the same world even after!

posted October 13, 2007 02:57 AM         

This is SOOOOOoooooo beautiful!

Truely animates my mind, brings thoughts ranging from tree spirits all the way through Mayan culture!

Amazing!

posted October 13, 2007 11:48 PM         

When you don't know what you are at
When you can't find the way to go
When the trusted shoulder's quit and its time for the new to keep away
Never mind, it's just the world

When you detest all your life
For it being so hard on you
When it all comes down hard
For you never knew it was coming

Don't give up just yet; your day might be around
You thought the same
When something broke inside you, some time in the past
You thought all is lost

Something that's not even a concern anymore

You don't know how you crossed it
No more pain, it just a memory
You know even this pain
No more it will last

This too will pass.

All the world is a stage
It's all the same
We are all players
What a Shakespearean thought

posted November 28, 2007 11:26 PM         

Now that you are gone,
I am here, I am there
I am everywhere
Trying to find where I left your thoughts

Baby, it was just a little kiss
A little too long, a little too good
May be I had your picture
A little too deep, a little too closer to my heart

Some day, some way
I will forget the nights
Some day, some way
I will accept your wish

It was a little too beautiful
The little rocks we climbed,
The little time we spent together
It was a little too good to be true

For you had those rare moments
When you let everything go
When you let your emotions flow
Like the little stream which can ebb and flow

Like a little kid my joy ebbed and flew
Watching your thoughts flow
For you were like the deep ocean
So serene and so calm on the surface

So deep and so mysterious
That nothing would be enough to impregnate
So deep and so quiet
That the world can never see the life’s nurtured inside

Some day, some way
I will forget your little smiles
Some day, some way
I will forget that your mind was so virgin

Independence was of prime importance
That you buried Venus under your castle of independence
So oblivious that interdependence and independence
Have to balance on the scales for the world to evolve

It’s my time to let go,
To let you wage your own battle
Deep inside
To find your own self

I love you,
I need you,
I want to live with you,
How many more I can stand in your way?

As long as I have my I’s stand before you,
My love can never be pure,
I will let you go, deep into your world
I will go away, with a little smile on my face

That I loved you, with all the heart I had
That I cared with all my eyes open

When there is so much love in letting go,
When there is much pride in doing so

posted November 28, 2007 11:59 PM         

People come into your life for a reason, a season, or a lifetime. When you figure out which it is, you know exactly what to do.

When someone is in your life for a REASON, it is usually to meet a need you have expressed outwardly or inwardly. They have come to assist you through a difficulty, to provide you with guidance and support, to aid you physically, emotionally, or spiritually. They may seem like a godsend, and they are. They are there for the reason you need them to be. Then, without any wrong doing on your part or at an inconvenient time, this person will say or do something to bring the relationship to an end. Sometimes they die. Sometimes they walk away. Sometimes they act up or out and force you to take a stand. What we must realize is that our need has been met, our desire fulfilled; their work is done. The prayer you sent up has been answered and it is now time to move on.

When people come into your life for a SEASON, it is because your turn has come to share, grow, or learn. They may bring you an experience of peace or make you laugh. They may teach you something you have never done. They usually give you an unbelievable amount of joy. Believe it! It is real! But, only for a season.

LIFETIME relationships teach you lifetime lessons; those things you must build upon in order to have a solid emotional foundation. Your job is to accept the lesson, love the person/people (anyway); and put what you have learned to use in all other relationships and areas of your life. It is said that love is blind but friendship is clairvoyant.

posted November 29, 2007 12:36 AM         

I totally lost my ability to show my anger or frustration on anybody. I dont even remember when was the last time I shouted at some one. I have been using poems as a tool to let my emotions go. Thats why I sound like a hurt soul all the time.I hope it changes some day

posted November 29, 2007 09:13 AM         

"Know that the pain will pass, and, when it passes, you will be stronger, happier, more sensitive and aware."
Mel Colgrove

posted November 29, 2007 10:59 AM         

You know what I see when I read your work? I see an intense musical harmony to it. I think you would do really well as a songwriter. Are you into music at all?

This is great work! I hope my comment on your grammatical errors didn't bother you too much. I'm a bit of a stickler when it comes to those things, but not without reason. I actually appreciate unconventionality, because it helps widen the mind by calling trains of thought out from their tracks and onto roads less traveled.

Just to make my point clear, for both of our benefits, I'll give an example. In your first poem you used the word "Thou" in what seemed to be expressions that meant the use of the word "Though".

quote:

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Thou we shall not
Speak a word of wrong when he is there for us
Thou we cannot
Think a moment of wrong when he can't be with us

Thou it's not a mistake
To wish that he can be here all the time
Truth is what we need to accept
That he has to go around to come back.

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When I first read this it really made me think a bit. I tried to make the meaning of "Thou" fit into your context, but I couldn't "get it". Reading it again, now, I am starting to make a connection between "Thou/You" and "Though" by thinking further about the meaning behind the word "though". It seems as "though" it has a very unique and intriguing relationship when introduced to sentences. Wherever you find it, it's almost like it creates some sort of unity within two differing or opposing subjects. An example of this would be: "Though I am here, I want to be there." Here and there are concepts that indicate an opposition of sorts, but the word "though" enters the sentence and provides a sort of flow as opposed to a more segmented, "I am here. I want to be there."
There are many other different uses and implications that this word has, but I feel I am at a dangerous point of losing your interest.
The whole point is that "Thou" is connected to "Though" in a distinct way. The mental image of the word "thou", or it's more modern version "you", initially provides one with a concept that seems opposed to "I". But the true essence of the concept behind "you" is much deeper than that and more related to the word "though" than one would instinctually guess.
All this thought transpired from your meek work and it is said that "the meek shall inherit the earth." Whether you intended this or not, it was inspired by these words. My purpose is to confront you and ask, "Did you do this on purpose?" If yes, then you have a much deeper understanding than I initially thought. If not, then I still think you have a much deeper understanding than I initially thought. I hope my expression of this urges you to delve deeper into the madness of words and unravel your natural talent.

posted November 29, 2007 12:49 PM         

Your comments on my grammatical errors didnt bother me at all. Infact, I appreciate your efforts. I see that as your attempts to see me improved. Thanks

The usage of Thou, I used to read shakespeare's poems and always wondered at the way he uses the word allowing the reader to find the context. Sometimes he will use it for expressing intimacy and it will change with the context he uses.

Whenever I write anything I feel as if Someone is standing at the point of happening and reciting it. Sometimes it messes up the grammer ( I know I also have my own issues with it). I am working on it, and hope to improve.

I started drifiting into music sometime back, but I do it for my own self.

posted November 29, 2007 06:22 PM         

It is possible you are feeling stuck because deep down you know you dont want to or "shouldnt" send it to her.

posted November 29, 2007 10:23 PM         

I agree with 26taurus. You should be clear with your intention. With that said, you should be well aware that the situation between you and her is not likely to change if she reads your poem. If you need her to read it for other reasons you may find, then so be it. I think you know very well, however, that the poem was written, first and foremost, for yourself.

Good luck, friend!

posted November 29, 2007 11:05 PM         

Looks like I have a few souls here from whom I can draw some strength.

Thank you friends.

posted November 29, 2007 11:05 PM         

It's the faith
That kept the trees from falling apart.

posted November 29, 2007 11:12 PM         

quote:

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I will let you go, deep into your world
I will go away, with a little smile on my face

That I loved you, with all the heart I had
That I cared with all my eyes open

When there is so much love in letting go,

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Keep that love with you always.

It will grow
and be even better "next time around"
with someone who wants to be with you as much as you want to be with her.

posted December 14, 2007 06:33 PM         

I don’t think you have found the one,
The one who you have been searching all the time
I don’t think the time has come yet
For you to give it all to get it all

The one who makes you wander
All along carrying your illusions
The one who makes you ponder
All the time to find out what’s going on

Will not be the one
Who you want to be with all life
Will not be the one
Who deserves your best.

You have got the wrong one
To go with
If you have to cut your toe
To wear your shoe

The right one
Will give you a great deal
Of what you want
Of what you need

Will never ask you to
Train yourself to be better
Will never ask you to
Strain your soul to serve

It all those nice words
Working all the magic in your head
It’s all those etiquette
Working its part to fool

It’s all the layers of mask
What you see is what’s portrayed
What you like now
Wont last long to survive the vagaries of the world

Wait for the time
The time to dawn
What you sow
Is what you reap

Hold on to the love
The love which is in your heart
Keep giving it out in abundance
It will come back, when you are ready to live without it.

Don’t hate the one
Who left your eyes wet
Every man has his good and his ugly
Just remember, it’s not his time to understand your heart

Don’t let this moment
Hold your spirits
Every man has his ups and downs
Just remember, the world needs only those who can learn from their mistakes

strtnash.

posted December 14, 2007 10:15 PM         

You've got such a strong voice, good sir. It sounds like you connect to something really intense during your synthesis. I wonder what the process is like when you write...Does it stream as a whole or does it trickle in parts?

My favorite parts:

quote:

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The one who makes you wander
All along carrying your illusions

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quote:

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What you like now
Wont last long to survive the vagaries of the world

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Your comfort in asking me for my opinions/suggestions is obliging and, so, I shall humbly acquiesce. lol

"It all those nice words"
I think you meant to write "It's..." here.

"It's all those etiquette"
You could go one of two ways here:
the word "etiquette" is singular and it's being identified by the word "those" which is meant for identifying plural subjects. You could either write "It's all that etiquette", "It's all those etiquettes" or you could just leave it and add points to your poetic license. lol It all depends on what your intention is...

That's about it, bud.

All in all, another great piece of work.

posted December 14, 2007 11:00 PM         

It does trickle in parts, I always have a feeling in my mind which I try to express through the poem. So what ever I write I try to direct the flow towards it. I dont write very often but when I do I complete it within couple of hours or so,I can never break it since the thought flow would be different at a later time.

"It all those nice words" It was a typo, I didnt notice it.

"It's all those etiquette" A genuine mistake. "It's all that etiquette" should be the correct one.

Thanks, I have a lot of scope to improve my grammar. You can certainly help me on that.

posted December 14, 2007 11:11 PM         

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Keep giving it out in abundance
It will come back, when you are ready to live without it.

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It struck me so much when I wrote it, I have always loved the ones (sill they have a good place in my heart) with an expectation to get it back. Never once I have just given it out without expecting.Its hard to do but not impossible.

posted December 15, 2007 12:07 AM         

It's funny that you should perceive a female tone in my writing. I'm totally a dude. lol
You could be sensing my Venus conjunct Mercury in Cancer. The sensitivity can get pretty intense at times.

At least you got the water sign influence correct, so I wouldn't give up on your pyschic abilities completely. lol

You know, upon reading your poetry I got the feeling that you finished each one "in the moment", so to speak, because of the continuity of the emotions in each one you write...

quote:

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Keep giving it out in abundance
It will come back, when you are ready to live without it.

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Yes! I especially liked that line too! Indeed, the desire to be loved can be quite dangerous. However, without this desire one would be hard put to find a place to start. Perhaps?

posted December 19, 2007 01:04 PM         

I try to write them in a few hours. I cannot stop it and come back after a few days to continue. The thought process will be so different at a later time and there will not be any continuity. (at least for me)

Since you have already tried your hand in writing, write what ever you want to. after some good writing you can see how you are slowly improving. Don't expect the poem to be well written or how it would be read by others. Its for you, you are the creater. Its your poem and "its for you".

Over time it will get better and better. It will certainly improve your thought process. But make sure that every poem is aligned with your principles and values. You dont want to write things in a way that you feel bad about the whole world and everything that happens in it.

posted December 19, 2007 01:48 PM         

I really miss how good I felt when writing poetry. It was like a release of bad energy for me. Just felt refreshed. And I could only seem to write when I was alone. And since I now have kids, that would explain the absence of anything since lol! I should try again...been awhile.

You really seem to have a natural nack for writing...really a pleasure to read!