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Topic: Comment on my translation poem and tell me what you think?
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PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 06, 2011 04:27 PM
  
On this beautiful night, the sky decides to drop the cold onto our laps in hopes that we use our senses to look inside ourselves to find our loved ones for warmth. Like spinning a top, My head turns in every direction and all I see around me are the comforting snowflakes that leave my fiery passion on ice. My pessimism keeps me wondering if I’m praying to the clouds or if there is something beyond? Right now it doesn’t matter. The only things that matter are the subjects of my prayer is;"THE ONE". I feel like the only human surrounded by walking, talking mannequins. I know he’s out there, but the search is becoming virtually impossible. It seems that every genuine person I meet speaks to me with out once mentioning their luggage. They’re the ones who speak venom with words of friendship and the ones whose hearts’ are shared with another. One person in particular says our friendship is made of a diamond necklace; So valuable but yet, can be lost so easily.He doesn’t realize that our relationship is like a caterpillar; As we bring an end to our friendship to start something more intimate, we will only make our connection flourish. The butterfly effect, I’m torn. I guess, it’s my fault I just want to try something new. Love with out condition. Devotion with out the hope of reciprocity. Because being around a bunch of people doesn’t mean Your happy. Your still empty inside. You've been lonely so long you can’t remember what happiness feels like. Your numb. I guess love doesn’t have a place in your life; And location is everything, Right?
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lalalinda
Moderator Posts: 1522
From: nevada
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 06, 2011 10:40 PM
Beautiful Darlin(transferring this to Yellow Wax Forum)  IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 06, 2011 11:32 PM
do you know what Im talking about?IP: Logged |
lalalinda
Moderator Posts: 1522
From: nevada
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 07, 2011 01:01 AM
no I don't, sorry.But it's beautiful none the less and looks like poetry or creative writing and this is a better forum for this piece. IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 07, 2011 01:17 AM
lol okay thank you linda  ...I have a ? how do I get a personal reading?IP: Logged |
lalalinda
Moderator Posts: 1522
From: nevada
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 07, 2011 04:02 AM
We have a Forum called Personal Readings
go over there, I think you'll like it.Oh and PrettyPisces, Welcome to LL  IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 9812
From: The Goober Galaxy
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 07, 2011 02:33 PM
Welcome!IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 9812
From: The Goober Galaxy
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 08, 2011 11:55 AM
Do you think this friend is The One?IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 08, 2011 07:56 PM
I was writing in general, But I was thinking about My friend the whole time I was writing this...Do you get what I was writing about?IP: Logged |
Cancer/Scorpio729
Moderator Posts: 824
From: 6,000 feet above sea level
Registered: Feb 2010
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posted July 09, 2011 12:31 PM
quote:
Originally posted by PrettyPisces:
Do you get what I was writing about?
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Randall
Webmaster Posts: 9812
From: The Goober Galaxy
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 09, 2011 01:31 PM
Affirmative.IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 09, 2011 04:32 PM
Cancer/Scorpio...were you trying to write a quote?...I see something posted.
So how do you feel about it...do you like it?IP: Logged |
Cancer/Scorpio729
Moderator Posts: 824
From: 6,000 feet above sea level
Registered: Feb 2010
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posted July 10, 2011 02:17 AM
Yup, I quoted you from one of your previous posts and replied underneath it.I do like it, especially the writing style. Very vivid. IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 10, 2011 11:13 PM
lol oh okay I dont see the quoteIP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 9812
From: The Goober Galaxy
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 11, 2011 12:08 PM
She was quoting your question above, not the poem.IP: Logged |
PrettyPisces
Newflake Posts: 18
From: Cambria heights,NY
Registered: Jun 2011
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posted July 11, 2011 11:11 PM
oh okay thanks lolIP: Logged |
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