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Topic: "Beyond Clear"
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Virgo-AriesArtist
Knowflake Posts: 463
From: Michigan :)
Registered: Jun 2009
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posted May 21, 2012 10:32 PM
  
Sitting on the ledge
Feeling stupid and naive
Why is this so difficult,
and why can't my heart be appeased?
Bring silence to the nagging urge
I'm done being filled with doubt
Show me what the point is,
and why I must now speak out?
It's truly a simple concept
a hand reach with no risk
I'm completely over-complicating
a gesture of cheerful pitch
So why is my mind in knots,
and seeing the worst react?
a final snub from a kindred soul
where I cannot take words back...? IP: Logged |
IndigoDirae
Knowflake Posts: 221
From: Venice, California, US
Registered: Jul 2011
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posted May 22, 2012 01:38 PM
I prefer my poetry with a little rhyme scheme, to be honest; even though, I've seen some wonderful free verse here.I really enjoyed the balance of this one, however, and theme was very powerful. Universally-relatable, I'd say. It just struck me. A hard message delivered with soft simplicity. -A IP: Logged |
Virgo-AriesArtist
Knowflake Posts: 463
From: Michigan :)
Registered: Jun 2009
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posted May 22, 2012 01:41 PM
Thanks, IndigoDirae  I love it when other people can relate to my feelings, and it reassures me that I took the personal situation out of the poem, which to me makes it more interesting.Thank you for your lovely observations and compliments! IP: Logged | |
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