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Topic: "Tag"
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Virgo-AriesArtist
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From: MidWest :)
Registered: Jun 2009
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posted March 27, 2013 12:51 AM
  
Cloudy overloaded senses
tactile waves just make me pensive
Space invaded, boundaries toed
Where's the clarity on this muddy road? Speak without circles, breathe without jest
Bring light to intentions, let my heart rest
The yo-yo is numbing, I find the air thick
where am I led now, and will I be sick? Seriously stunned
caught between fear and fun
The chord just grows strong
as we unriddle our song ------------------
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pippastrelle
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Registered: Nov 2012
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posted March 28, 2013 08:53 AM
Excellent write, beautifully written  IP: Logged |
secondhandspine
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posted March 29, 2013 09:40 AM
I really enjoyed your poem. Wonderful imagery and it made me think. Thank you! IP: Logged |
Swift Freeze
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Registered: Nov 2009
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posted April 01, 2013 11:32 AM
Beautiful, thank you.- Chris ------------------
Learn lots. Don't judge. Laugh for no reason. Be nice. Seek Happiness. Follow your dreams. IP: Logged |
Virgo-AriesArtist
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Registered: Jun 2009
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posted April 01, 2013 11:40 AM
Thank you pippastrelle, secondhandspine, and Swift Freeze. I am pleased this one touched you  ------------------
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mirage29
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Registered: May 2012
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posted April 04, 2013 07:16 PM
I like how the rhythm at the end of the phrase acts like the swing of an old-fashioned carriage-return [now, Enter button]... This has a cool rhythmic beating to it... Thankyou for your depth! Thanks V-AA IP: Logged |
Virgo-AriesArtist
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posted April 04, 2013 07:23 PM
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Originally posted by mirage29:
I like how the rhythm at the end of the phrase acts like the swing of an old-fashioned carriage-return [now, Enter button]... This has a cool rhythmic beating to it... Thankyou for your depth! Thanks V-AA
Thank you, mirage. I have been trying to figure out with several of my recent poems a very perplexing acquaintance, and it seems to get murkier/cloudier as I go...poetry is the only way I muddle through
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charmainec
Moderator Posts: 6368
From: Venus next to Randall
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted April 08, 2013 02:25 AM
Good poem.
"Speak without circles.." makes me think of mind games or someone trying to be mysteriousThe title "Tag" suits the poem perfectly.  IP: Logged |
Virgo-AriesArtist
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posted April 08, 2013 11:51 PM
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Originally posted by charmainec:
Good poem.
"Speak without circles.." makes me think of mind games or someone [b] trying to be mysteriousThe title "Tag" suits the poem perfectly. [/B]
Thank you, Miss Charm I do believe the person in question *does* intend to be mysterious...think Gemini Rising, LOL  I am pleased you agree with the title ------------------
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