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Topic: I am who I say you say I am
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Iced8Ace
Knowflake Posts: 97
From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted November 27, 2014 08:07 PM
  
I am who I say you say I amA broken mirror
Tell us again what you wanted to hear
The bickering of an ageless fear
Caught desperately in between
Reflecting what exactly?
The direct youth forgotten
Make no mistakes
Your reflections rotten
Lips parted by dust
Contemplative swing
Younger than us
In the mood for nothing
Tiresome ideas
I can't listen anyhow
Where are you leaning?
Out the window Strong Motive, Red Resolve Spilled miles hit the pavement of a forgotten trip, pictured on the road, movable but slow.
Seated in acoustic thunder, stole the key to sunrise as night cloaks your gown
Squall'd into town, smooth cruise as the boat shakes your ground
So you take off
Foreign flights close your home and you lose your sum
The dress, a dead dream from a dear husband
Disclaimer: The two poems are not connected
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thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 895
From: Antwerp, Belgium
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted November 28, 2014 02:15 AM
Had me lost..this is so eternal sort of feeling..i could feel the tears of love and feeling of belongingness..so so so dear..like waiting for someone to turn around and see you in the darkest hour, where there is no one else but the two of you…Loved it..  IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 47375
From: Saturn next to Charmainec
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted November 29, 2014 10:29 AM
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Iced8Ace
Knowflake Posts: 97
From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted November 29, 2014 05:25 PM
@thequeen Your interpretation is one of the reasons why I like writing the way I do. Thank you for enjoying!  @Randall Thanks! IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 3113
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted December 01, 2014 05:04 PM
Wow again, Iced8Ace!  so much living loss, so much living lost: ... so alive! IP: Logged |
Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 549
From:
Registered: Sep 2010
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posted December 01, 2014 09:03 PM
wonderful. both poems are beautiful. I personally love the second onebetter, but that's just a matter of feeling.IP: Logged |
Iced8Ace
Knowflake Posts: 97
From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted December 02, 2014 06:51 PM
Thank you, mirage I enjoyed the quote you addedThe second one is very dear to me, thanks Ayelet! IP: Logged |
Pearlty
Moderator Posts: 823
From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted December 03, 2014 11:16 AM
Both are a stunning reception of various deeply driven emotions. Enjoyed reading them. IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 3113
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted December 04, 2014 04:43 PM
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Iced8Ace
Knowflake Posts: 97
From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted December 07, 2014 06:59 PM
Thank you for enjoying them, Pearlty IP: Logged |
Charmaine
Moderator Posts: 30
From: Venus Next To Randall
Registered: Dec 2014
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posted December 09, 2014 08:58 AM
Loved it.IP: Logged |
Iced8Ace
Knowflake Posts: 97
From: CA
Registered: Aug 2014
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posted December 10, 2014 06:58 PM
Thank you Charmaine IP: Logged |
Charmaine
Moderator Posts: 30
From: Venus Next To Randall
Registered: Dec 2014
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posted December 11, 2014 03:50 AM
You're welcome! IP: Logged |
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