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posted September 16, 2015 09:58 AM            

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Awake the sun stretching
over fleckled sky
as brisk air beckons a morning fire
and for us to arise.

Warming the hearth
for our daily bread
by noon the heavy kettle
will bubble over,
with our late supper stew.

Each day we work hard
surrounded by our simplicity
surviving and replenishing our sinew.

We fall away tired each night
and continue our earnest lives
doing what we have to
for the day to begin
once again, anew.

Note: I helped my daughter write a poem recently for Literature class. She said.. "mom please keep it simple and not too many big words" lol. The theme was to be how people lived 1800's.. or before. I couldn't think of much to help her along, besides waking up in that era rurally and how I would feel and what the days would entail. I'm not sure what grade she received- hopefully something decent.

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posted September 16, 2015 01:47 PM            

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This is so naive. A day to day picturesque imagery of routine life written. Wants to make me thank almighty for giving the basic daily bread to us in living. Exquisite !!

What was your daughter's reaction on this poetry

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posted September 16, 2015 07:30 PM            

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Lovely poem. It is interesting, what the tired people had to do each night for their day to begin anew... To dream?

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posted September 16, 2015 09:42 PM            

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posted September 17, 2015 02:17 PM            

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A pleasure to read.

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posted September 18, 2015 08:07 AM            

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Thanks all

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What was your daughter's reaction on this poetry

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She liked it. She's my more science, math, music minded child- rather than the Lit./writing etc. So she was thankful for the help.

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posted September 19, 2015 01:09 PM            

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Thanks all

She liked it. She's my more science, math, music minded child- rather than the Lit./writing etc. So she was thankful for the help.

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Thankful to her talented mother You deserve it.

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posted September 20, 2015 11:40 AM            

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Thanks for the kind words thequeen. Appreciate that!

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posted October 07, 2015 11:07 AM            

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Update on the assignment, we didn't do well according to her Lit. teacher. She received a 10/20 -her reasoning was the poem didn't meet criteria. I told my daughter well you win some you lose some, take it as a compliment many times poems don't fit neatly into the mold of criteria, form, or rules. Which neither do people sometimes as well.

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posted October 09, 2015 04:57 PM            

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That was very highly said Pearlty. Buckle her up for the greater rides of life. We don't fit or belong anywhere all we do is push ourselves hard to fit in. Sad to hear her teacher's remark because it's a beautifully woven poetry.

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posted October 12, 2015 12:17 AM            

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You can't really put a grade on art. Either your emotions/intelect/soul are stirred or they don't. I don't know what mold the teacher was talking about. I've studied music and felt like my creativity was damaged somewhat due to all the "rules" one had to obey in order to create a legitimate piece of music.

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posted October 12, 2015 10:44 AM            

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^ Whole heartily agree with both of you. ^

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posted October 13, 2015 02:45 PM            

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^ Whole heartily agree with both of you. ^

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