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Topic: Brutality
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thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 2669
From: The Devil Wears Prada
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 09, 2016 04:22 PM
  
The rain poured down, and hit my head,
And slit my wrist, poured something red,
That trickled to drops, in rain it dissolved,
My vague groan, from my bosom evolved,
You stood so close, encouraged me more,
Underneath your sleeves, a dagger you wore,
Propelled it at me, till it came to halt,
Stabbed in my chest, protracting the vault,
The chirping of birds, instantly ceased,
They envisioned a soul, was deceased,
Yet you grinned, hauled me like stone,
To burn me on pyre, to extinct my clone,
My chest pounded aloud, when your hands touched mine,
My eyes gaped wide, negative of brine,
The rainbow too, faded to Gray,
My love I surrendered, as your hunger’s prey,
I clenched your hand, couldn’t just leave,
But my strength, on my back deceived,
You threw me away, on death bed,
And lit the logs, while I bled,
Charring my skin, I felt the flame,
My soul left me, I lost again,
I saw you standing, with grim in your eyes,
My soul clenched to you, to your eternal price.IP: Logged |
Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 1602
From:
Registered: Sep 2010
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posted July 09, 2016 06:07 PM
I missed your writing 
This one beautifully makes one shudder..IP: Logged |
thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 2669
From: The Devil Wears Prada
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 10, 2016 05:03 AM
Hey Ayelet, have missed your presence around here lately.
Thanks for going through IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 67718
From: Saturn next to Charmaine
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 11, 2016 01:16 PM
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Pearlty
Moderator Posts: 1428
From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted July 11, 2016 10:15 PM
I felt like a "Poe" trepidition writing style in this- dark in some kind of swallowy depths. Very thoughtworthy to turn over in one's mind. IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 5821
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted July 12, 2016 12:27 AM
T.Q. ... Intense and picturesque.  I've missed you too! Reminds me of scenes of a past-life regression. Also, a kind of blending and layers, like dried bumpy lines of acrylic paint crusted on canvas... angsty pain, sex, an intimate encounter, and even mysticism, like a mystical orgasm and climax. La Petite Mort. Ecstasy and pain of a Soul gripped helpless and passionately by its Beloved. Dark, and interesting. (I've forgotten whether or not you are into spiritual development? ... But I recall from the past that I tend to want to spiritualize and sexualize your writings.... ) Mars transiting Scorpio right now. Cool way to describe the energy. IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 67718
From: Saturn next to Charmaine
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 13, 2016 10:32 AM
quote:
Originally posted by mirage29:
T.Q. ... Intense and picturesque. I've missed you too! Reminds me of scenes of a past-life regression. Also, a kind of blending and layers, like dried bumpy lines of acrylic paint crusted on canvas... angsty pain, sex, an intimate encounter, and even mysticism, like a mystical orgasm and climax. La Petite Mort. Ecstasy and pain of a Soul gripped helpless and passionately by its Beloved. Dark, and interesting. (I've forgotten whether or not you are into spiritual development? ... But I recall from the past that I tend to want to spiritualize and sexualize your writings.... ) Mars transiting Scorpio right now. Cool way to describe the energy.
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thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 2669
From: The Devil Wears Prada
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 14, 2016 02:50 PM
Pearlty, that is a great comparison. I admire his writing as well. He compiles his dark work with great perfection. Thanks for going through.IP: Logged |
thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 2669
From: The Devil Wears Prada
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 14, 2016 03:04 PM
TY mirage for your wonderful insight. Would have never thought of it in that manner. Enjoyed your crisp description TY for going through Randall. IP: Logged |
Elysia
Knowflake Posts: 1721
From: Gotham
Registered: Aug 2015
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posted July 30, 2016 11:42 PM
Loved it! So gripping.. My 8th-housey self likes this sort of writing. IP: Logged |
thequeen
Knowflake Posts: 2669
From: The Devil Wears Prada
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted July 31, 2016 02:40 PM
maybe it is my 8th house Mars doing the trick ty for reading...IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 5821
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted August 01, 2016 02:13 PM
Thanks T.Q.!! Joining the rest of our "8th Housey" influence here (so ~cute Elysia)! Watery Cancer Stellium--
Vesta Vertex Uranus Jupiter, and a Pluto Leo at e.o. (so, Pluto shares both 8th and the 9th)! Saturn-rx is in Scorpio-Deeps in the 11th. Juno there too, and in next degree will re-experience her return again trine my Mars Cancer. I Poets! IP: Logged | |
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