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Topic: Song Of Destitute...
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thequeen
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posted January 22, 2019 06:53 AM
  
The song of destitute was sung by me,
Interrupted as usual by you in glee,
In wildernesses I etched my clone in yours,
And took a parade on the terrain coarse,
The green foggy shawl in air swayed,
I attuned high notes and music played,
Of rustling leaves and splattering drops,
The rain too fell like dancing crops,
The farmers harvested grains of rice,
Drenched in mud neglecting the price,
As I had a vision of your gleaming eyes,
I hit low notes breathing the skies,
As the rained poured more my voice swelled,
I harmonized like a bird in your bosom dwelled,
In flashes of aging bolts and blue,
I closed my eyes to ponder of you,
You oscillated in front of my eyes,
My floating angel my song of vice,
Playing the symphony of melodious scam,
Let’s play my love let’s play this game.
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Ayelet
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posted January 22, 2019 01:46 PM
Very rich texture to your vivid, colourful images, thequeen. I liked how the rain of crops brought you to earth, and the way you knit above and below into a nature-love poem. IP: Logged |
ballerina
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From: A Place on Earth
Registered: Feb 2014
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posted January 22, 2019 03:32 PM
The descriptions are wonderful!
I love the last line...------------------
All my love, with all my Heart
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Pearlty
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From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted January 22, 2019 03:44 PM
A stark & beautiful balancing of nature and love..   IP: Logged |
Randall
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From: From a galaxy, far, far away...
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 23, 2019 01:58 PM
Vibrant imagery.IP: Logged |
thequeen
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posted January 27, 2019 09:35 AM
Thank you Ayelet for your beautiful interpretation.Thanks ballenrina, Pearlty and Randall..
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mirage29
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Registered: May 2012
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posted January 27, 2019 10:01 AM
TQ.. oops. Sorry. I spent a long time reading and contemplating your work, then never posted.Love it!  IP: Logged |
thequeen
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posted January 30, 2019 09:17 AM
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Originally posted by mirage29:
TQ.. oops. Sorry. I spent a long time reading and contemplating your work, then never posted.Love it!
Thank you so much mirage IP: Logged |
mirage29
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posted January 30, 2019 03:54 PM
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