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Topic: A Lexi For All Gooberz Who Wait
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Pumpkin Peace
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posted February 22, 2009 03:57 PM
 AT WHAT TIME SHALL I MEET MY GOOOBER? (I did the best I could to make it rhyme. I'd be glad if any errors were pointed out)   THAT TIME IS ALWAYS HERE
THE ETHERS WAIT, HER WISH, TO HEAR
HER EYES ARE AGLOW
SHE IS A MAGE
WHILE SHE IMAGES HER GOOOBER,
SHE WILL SAY,
"I WISH TO MEET HIM AT THIS TIME. IT SHALL BE SO." RIGHT AWAY, TO HER, HE'LL GO
HE'LL GREET HER SWEETLY
THEIR EYES WILL MEET
HE'LL HOLD HER SO TIGHTLY
SHE'LL HEAR HIS HEART BEAT
TO HER HEART'S SLOW RHYTHM THEY SHALL ABOLISH ALL LIES
TWO SHALL MELT TOGETHER
TO BE WHOLE AT LAST!
OTHERS SHALL ALWAYS SEE THEM
AS A BRIGHT, IMMORTAL STAR
THE WAY THEY WERE AT BIRTH ARISE, ALL HEARTS!
HEAR THE BELLS
(Note: At any part where it says "HER" or "SHE", a "HE", "HIM", or "HIS" can easily replace it. I just thought it would sound awkward if it was constantly saying "HE/SHE", "HIS/HER", etc. Enjoy!)
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LEXX
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posted February 22, 2009 04:52 PM
quote:
(I did the best I could to make it rhyme. I'd be glad if any errors were pointed out)
I really appreciate your wanting to create/birth, error free Lexigrams!
Thank you for allowing me to help!
OK.....
Only 1 error!
HOL(d)
No letter "D".Also did you intentionally spell Goober
with an extra letter "O", as on Gooober? Otherwise,
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LEXX
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From: Still out looking for Schrödinger's cat.........& LEXIGRAMMING... is my Passion!
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posted February 22, 2009 05:45 PM
Whew!
Replacing the word HOL(d) was very difficult! 
And I wanted to preserve your rhyming pattern too.
quote:
THAT TIME IS ALWAYS HERE
THE ETHERS WAIT, HER WISH, TO HEAR
HER EYES ARE AGLOW
SHE IS A MAGE
WHILE SHE IMAGES HER GOOBER,
SHE WILL SAY,
"I WISH TO MEET HIM AT THIS TIME. IT SHALL BE SO."RIGHT AWAY, TO HER, HE'LL GO
HE'LL GREET HER SWEETLY
THEIR EYES WILL MEET
HE'LL HOL(d) HER SO TIGHTLY...........replacement suggestions are: as by his breast she lies so tightly
or
as by his heart she lies so tightly
or
as by his arms she lies so tightly
or
as by his heart she lay so tightly
or
as by his heart she lay so tightly
or
as by his arms she lay so tightly
or
as she lay by his breast so tightly
or
as she lay by his heart so tightly
or
as she lay by his arms so tightly
or
as she lies by his breast so tightly
or
as she lies by his heart so tightly
or
as she lies by his arms so tightly The word hol(d) is a very hard one to replace because the synonyms also
have letters you cannot get from the phrase you have Lexigrammed.
Words and a phrase such as:
bear h(u)g,
(c)las(p)
(c)radle
(c)u(dd)le
e(nc)ir(c)le quote:
SHE'LL HEAR HIS HEART BEAT
TO HER HEART'S SLOW RHYTHMTHEY SHALL ABOLISH ALL LIES
TWO SHALL MELT TOGETHER
TO BE WHOLE AT LAST!
OTHERS SHALL ALWAYS SEE THEM
AS A BRIGHT, IMMORTAL STAR
THE WAY THEY WERE AT BIRTH ARISE, ALL HEARTS!
HEAR THE BELLS
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LEXX
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posted February 22, 2009 06:20 PM
You also used these contractions correctly!  HE'LL=HE WILL
SHE'LL=SHE WILL You DO HAVE the complete word "WILL"
so using the contraction; she'll and he'll is A-OK! IP: Logged |
LEXX
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From: Still out looking for Schrödinger's cat.........& LEXIGRAMMING... is my Passion!
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted February 22, 2009 06:28 PM
I removed the extra "O" from Goober.AT WHAT TIME SHALL I MEET MY GOOBER
AAA B EEEE G HH II LL M OO R S TTTT W Y
You have only 4 DIFFERENT vowels
Ax3 Ex4 Ix2 Ox3
You have only 10 DIFFERENT consonants
Bx1 Gx1 Hx2 Lx2 Mx1 Rx1 Sx1 Tx4 Wx1 Yx1
Leaving a total of only 14 DIFFERENT LETTERS!
So in my opinion, by my rules and even Linda's, your phrase:
AT WHAT TIME SHALL I MEET MY GOOBER
is just fine!
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Pumpkin Peace
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posted February 22, 2009 06:29 PM
Ah, there's always something. Lol. Yes, I did spell Gooober with three O's on purpose, because that way it adds up to 33 in numerology, the reason Linda spelled it that way, as well. How about... HE'LL GREET HER SWEETLY
THEIR EYES WILL MEET
SHE'LL SMILE SO LIGHTLY,
TO HEAR HOW HIS HEART BEATS
TO THE SAME RHYTHM AS HERS
AS HER EAR LIES AT HIS BREAST
WITH THE OTHER THEY'RE BOTH AT REST THEY SHALL ABOLISH ALL LIES ... etc etc.
Thanks for your help. IP: Logged |
LEXX
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From: Still out looking for Schrödinger's cat.........& LEXIGRAMMING... is my Passion!
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posted February 22, 2009 06:41 PM
quote:
Ah, there's always something. Lol.
Yes, but you were open to fixing it!
quote:
Yes, I did spell Gooober with three O's on purpose, because that way it adds up to 33 in numerology, the reason Linda spelled it that way, as well.
I kinda figured that might be why but was not sure. Thanks for clarifying! quote:
How about...HE'LL GREET HER SWEETLY
THEIR EYES WILL MEET
SHE'LL SMILE SO LIGHTLY,
TO HEAR HOW HIS HEART BEATS
TO THE SAME RHYTHM AS HERS
AS HER EAR LIES AT HIS BREAST
WITH THE OTHER THEY'RE BOTH AT REST THEY SHALL ABOLISH ALL LIES ... etc etc.
Absolutely wonderful!
quote:
Thanks for your help.
Thank YOU for allowing me to help!
It is good practice for me too!IP: Logged |
Randall
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From: Columbus, GA USA
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted February 23, 2009 11:36 PM
Great work, Pumpkin Peace!  ------------------
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Pumpkin Peace
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posted February 26, 2009 03:58 PM
Thanks, Randall! IP: Logged |
Randall
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posted May 05, 2009 10:38 AM
*bump*------------------
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LEXX
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From: Still out looking for Schrödinger's cat.........& LEXIGRAMMING... is my Passion!
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posted January 15, 2010 09:46 PM
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