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T O P I C R E V I E WIced8AceI combined two poems to offset my vagueness a bit.NumbHearts emptyI bled every spellEvery worryInto making nothing but mistakesfor youI was misinterpretedI pled again and againThey weren't having itWhose consequenceBut you meant itOr was my hearttoo numb to accept it?feel something;I wasn't absolutein my desiresto never part with us, lying to themwhat made differenceignited the sail boatthat set sail the dreams I craftedfrom every consequencesunk lowly into the moonlonely wind, biting ashstars that weren't seenblackened in passions mourning,burning every sentiment thatthawed me outRandall mirage29Iced8Ace... The Dreamer is the most excellent part of the dream. PearltySuch a compass of phenomenal thought here. Through numbness we alleviate some of the pain. AyeletSo you weren't whole with yourself, with the "us" concept? But you did sail...And does being "us" means lying to "them"?Iced8AceThank you, Randall. Mirage! So poignant. I adore your replies. Definitely, Pearlty. Ayelet, I rarely write from my own perspective. I think whats confusing about this poem is numbness represents a sense of disillusionment behind the narrator's earnest efforts and "feeling" represents the reflection of one's self through their partner's lens and arriving at clarity. Sorry for the confusion. The second part of your question I left purposely ambiguous so you can choose whether or not to question the narrator there. I can say though that not being fully resolved is due to the numbing of their heart by their consistent efforts. The first question pertains to the dreams, the ideas and the work the narrator put into the relationship that set sail. The narrator softly accepts at the end, that everything they've done through this lens of devoting their trust in their partner is what mixed in with their earnest proposal and essentially killed it. "Stars that weren't seen" no one will see the narrators good intentions. Then there's the boat that sunk into oblivion, of course....There's more but I hope it's clearer now.mirage29I like the depth of your discussion Iced8Ace Ayelet, wonderful cosmic perspective. So much truth. Pain, and separation... No matter how deep your analysis goes, remember to step back and smile at yourself? BEing and reflecting with Others is a safe harbor... YOU , are not 'the sunk-Thing'... You are Something Else more than that!
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Hearts emptyI bled every spellEvery worryInto making nothing but mistakesfor youI was misinterpretedI pled again and againThey weren't having itWhose consequenceBut you meant itOr was my hearttoo numb to accept it?feel something;I wasn't absolutein my desiresto never part with us, lying to themwhat made differenceignited the sail boatthat set sail the dreams I craftedfrom every consequencesunk lowly into the moonlonely wind, biting ashstars that weren't seenblackened in passions mourning,burning every sentiment thatthawed me out
Mirage! So poignant. I adore your replies.
Definitely, Pearlty.
Ayelet, I rarely write from my own perspective. I think whats confusing about this poem is numbness represents a sense of disillusionment behind the narrator's earnest efforts and "feeling" represents the reflection of one's self through their partner's lens and arriving at clarity. Sorry for the confusion. The second part of your question I left purposely ambiguous so you can choose whether or not to question the narrator there. I can say though that not being fully resolved is due to the numbing of their heart by their consistent efforts. The first question pertains to the dreams, the ideas and the work the narrator put into the relationship that set sail. The narrator softly accepts at the end, that everything they've done through this lens of devoting their trust in their partner is what mixed in with their earnest proposal and essentially killed it. "Stars that weren't seen" no one will see the narrators good intentions. Then there's the boat that sunk into oblivion, of course....
There's more but I hope it's clearer now.
Ayelet, wonderful cosmic perspective. So much truth. Pain, and separation...
No matter how deep your analysis goes, remember to step back and smile at yourself? BEing and reflecting with Others is a safe harbor... YOU , are not 'the sunk-Thing'... You are Something Else more than that!
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