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Topic: Connecting With Your Opposite
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trippysht unregistered
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posted December 18, 2002 05:46 PM
i'm workin on it carlo!! i had a lot in my head, and then it didnt make it to paper fast enough, so i'm in the process of document recovery in my brain may take time, you know us bulls...............IP: Logged |
taj unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 05:05 AM
In fields Elysian where flowed ambrosial wine and cavorted famed divinities, did the sage Chiron rest his learned gaze upon radiant Castor and Pollux? For there in the night sky immortalized, the noble Archer and scintillating twin orbs, perched, as decreed by the Fates on the edges of a celestial arbor.O astral cohort, When love's ideals poured forth from lips benevolent did you proffer your brow to be kissed? When Logos burrowed deep and flourished bright in the bridechamber of Sophia did space-time and all things ephemeral like quicksilver transfigure into that which is eternal? Tell me, O creature of the moment, in the gardens of Olympus did the healing potions of the wise Centaur make whole the fragmented light-spark that is Castor and Pollux? For here in the soul-expanse in perfect symmetry linked, as arranged by the Fates Mind and Spirit in the depths of a burnished heart. um, ok, carlo, how goes it so far? did my homework. Gemini = rules mind Sag = rules spirit thought about writing from the point of view of a gemini, though. my use of 'logos' and 'sophia' is based only on their superficial (not higher/spiritual) definitions, i.e., logos referring to reason and material knowledge as accumulated and communicated; sophia referring to wisdom. err… didn't realize until after I'd written it that the action of logos in sophia could have another meaning. wrote in the past tense as tis supposed to be a past love affair? it could just as easily be in the present tense, not?
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Jaqueline unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 11:15 AM
You are all wonderful !
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Aphrodite unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 11:31 AM
Taj,That is such a wonderfully written poem. It is artistically and intellectually beautiful. I love it. I am saving a copy of it for myself. Thank you for writing that. Aphrodite IP: Logged |
Carlo unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 12:30 PM
Oh...my...gods. Stunning!!! I am going to put it up now and look for illustrations. What a beautiful poem Yes, it could be present tense, if you preferred, yet past is better I think because you are invoking images of the ancient past, so I think it works better. The only Virgo comments I would make is that in the first couple lines, wine rhymes with divine (e.g, "and cavorted maids divine"), in case you liked that, yet that is just a Virgo-eye thing, the poem is exellent in every way! Let's see how it looks in present tense anyway, and all caps at the beginning of each line... In fields Elysian Where flow ambrosial wine And cavort famed divinities, Does the sage Chiron Rest his learned gaze Upon radiant Castor and Pollux? For there in the night sky Immortalizes, The noble Archer And scintillating twin orbs, Perches, As decreed by the Fates On the edges Of a celestial arbor. O astral cohort, When love's ideals Pour forth from Lips benevolent Do you proffer your brow To be kissed? When Logos Burrows deep and Flourishes bright In the bridechamber Of Sophia, Do space-time And all things ephemeral Like quicksilver Transfigure Into that which Is eternal? Tell me, O creature of the moment, In the gardens of Olympus Do the healing potions Of the wise Centaur make whole The fragmented light-spark That is Castor and Pollux? For here in the soul-expanse In perfect symmetry linked, As arranged by the Fates Mind and Spirit In the depths Of a burnished heart. *** Also, the last stanza, there is no verb. Did you mean to write one of the "in"s as an "is"? Would you like to give the poem a name? I don't know now, present looks pretty good too! What do you think? I like past better. Yes, if you could do a poem by Gemini to Sag, that would be sweet, since I don't even know one Gemini, boy or girl, in Lindaland. I just find it to be a nice way to learn more about one's opposite, just by doing a poem. If you do two, you will get a gold star on your forehead for the rest of the year Thank you again taj, it is just brilliant. Love, Carlo IP: Logged |
Carlo unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 02:14 PM
okay, take a look, let me know what you think this is everyone's page! http://lovestarz.com/connect.html Aphrodite, are you going to do one on Cancer Woman/Cappy Man? Where are all the non-Virgo Earth signs and all the Water signs? So far it's mostly the Fire and Air sign girls who are being prolific here. Anyone else even thinking about it? Take your time trippy, perfection cannot be rushed Taj and others who have made poems, please let me know if you have any feelings about how the poem looks on the page I am making. I can make any changes you like, so if you dont like a pic or something, just say so Love, Carlo IP: Logged |
Aphrodite unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 02:24 PM
Hi Sweets,Where did you get me being a Cancer Woman? I am Aries Sun I have yet to be with a Libra Man . . . so I don't have anything to contribute with regard to opposites. Aphrodite IP: Logged |
Carlo unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 03:45 PM
oh...oops well there is still room for one of those too!Love, Carlo IP: Logged |
taj unregistered
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posted December 23, 2002 11:11 PM
oh gee, many thanks, jakie, aphrodite, carlo! um, carlo, tis supposed to go: For there in the night sky (are) immortalized, the noble Archer and scintillating twin orbs, perched, as decreed by the Fates on the edges of a celestial arbor. For here in the soul-expanse in perfect symmetry (are) linked, as arranged by the Fates, Mind and Spirit in the depths of a burnished heart. they just sound more lyrical without the verbs. i think herbal potions/healing herbs goes more with 'garden' than 'healing potions'. what do you think? also, since I didn't make any subjective reference until the last part, can we change "tell me" to "pray tell"? and "this soul-expanse" instead of "the-" so that it refers to a specific physical being? heh. is my mars in virgo showing? thanks again! a point of interest: the myths say the twins were tutored by chiron. oh, i like "maids divine" as well. what about the lads, though? IP: Logged |
theFajita unregistered
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posted December 24, 2002 12:03 AM
Oh how can I contribute now after all these wonderful poems..y'all really put me in my place ------------------ Food is the only art that nourishes! IP: Logged |
taj unregistered
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posted December 24, 2002 03:21 AM
fajita, your place has only the word 'wonderful' in it! i am a reader of poems rather than a writer and i am waiting to read yours.
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theFajita unregistered
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posted December 24, 2002 04:49 AM
thanks taj g'nite! ------------------ Food is the only art that nourishes! IP: Logged |
proxieme unregistered
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posted December 24, 2002 09:32 AM
I'll work on it while @ my Mom's tonight; p'haps poetic energy flows better in the woods (you never know), or maybe Abbie the Wonder Mutt and Buddman, Captain Kittie Retardo (I was a bored child) will whimper and mewl musings.BTW, Carlo - you were right about "Adaptation"...absolutely flippin' amazing. Danita - Your poem'll be great IP: Logged |
Carlo unregistered
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posted December 24, 2002 12:28 PM
Oh Danita...you are so funny You're already perfect IP: Logged |
proxieme unregistered
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posted December 26, 2002 01:45 PM
And so (because life with us is never a beginning or an ending, but continually a continuance of that once said and unsaid and seen and felt) - and so, and so - You speak: "I feel, so I see, but having forgotten, reached out for a hand - finding yours." And I laugh, not in cruelty, but in Gratitude and Comfort and Joy. And so - We sigh, and stretch and run, as new life, unearthed, takes us and wakes us - seeing old faults and fresh instigations with clean eyes and skin and hearts and Souls. And so - IP: Logged |
proxieme unregistered
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posted December 26, 2002 02:33 PM
Memories in Me - of You in Me of Me as You.I and You Structure and then Scatter, Feel and Forgive and then tumble into Analysis and Clarity. Shaking now I Seek You, as You do Me - Towards Balance and Peace. __________Perfect Content. _____A Busy Mind, Stilled. _____A Broken Heart, Healed. It Lasts; then the Norm Regains, Mutable, Moved and Changed.
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Carlo unregistered
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posted December 27, 2002 12:27 PM
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Carlo unregistered
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posted December 29, 2002 11:57 AM
why'd you take them down? IP: Logged |
proxieme unregistered
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posted December 29, 2002 06:04 PM
I didn't like them. I'll work on better ones.IP: Logged |
Oxychick unregistered
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posted December 29, 2002 09:52 PM
Carlo...I was kidding with that 4-liner.... But I LOVE the artwork! Esp. the picture of the woman with the Lion. Ah, how that brings back memories... ------------------ "What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compared to what lies within us." -Ralph Waldo Emerson
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Carlo unregistered
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posted December 30, 2002 02:07 AM
Oxychicklet, that little poem is funny as hell It is quite befitting an Aquarius girl's comment on a Leo guy too, so it's just perfect. Of course, you are welcome to do another one any time you like, I'll add it. I love that little pic of the woman smoking leaning on the lion's head too I have had that image since the 1990s when I was the the writer and astrologer for another website that I did with a former knowflake. I love the poem girl, it fits well with all the other ones. Linda Goodman did both long and short ones, you ever read Venus Trines at Midnight? I always liked this one:"Mars is the ruler of Aries." "Nothing rules Aries." "Mars is the ruler of the first house." "That's better." lol okie Corri, I'll be patient Good things take time. What is your major anyway? Love, Carlo
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Oxychick unregistered
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posted December 30, 2002 06:50 AM
That picture was just fitting of that Leo and I. Of course, I'm not exactly built that nicely, but it's my fantasy. ------------------ "What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compared to what lies within us." -Ralph Waldo Emerson IP: Logged |
Carlo unregistered
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posted December 30, 2002 12:17 PM
oh oxy, you Aquarians are so humble sometimes, it's so sweet, it's like so opposite of Leo. I don't think I have ever known a humble Leo. Oh, they may be self effacing, yet I think it is just for effect, and that deep down they do think and know that they rule. Aquarius is so opposite that, isn't it? Well you look really pretty and sweet in your pic, so I bet that you really are I think that we all wind up resembling the type of person we are inside. Do you? Or do some people look totally different from what they are like?BB, Carlo IP: Logged |
theFajita unregistered
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posted December 30, 2002 03:22 PM
Yes is opposite Leo! But I do love em so!------------------ Food is the only art that nourishes! IP: Logged |
proxieme unregistered
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posted December 30, 2002 06:20 PM
I have an integrated studies major that's a combination of Anthro & Poli Sci.IP: Logged | |