posted January 14, 2015 09:06 PM            

You're quite a darling
With your masks and charades
You can text me the bible, and every sin you made
You can sell me your problems, and say you’ve got no cure
As your eyes say other things that can’t be told
Well babe, I ain’t gonna be the healer no more
I feel the pain and remorse, but ain’t enough to me
Tell someone else your half-cooked guilts

I've held enough and got myself suffering
From what I felt it was real
I’ve believed in you as I watch the reels
Of times that were good for giving
As your deeds make lovers get lost in the rain
Well babe, I’m just another man who felt in vain
Close from the dreams and far from the truth
Someone has to walk on and try to get tough

I’ve spend 40 days in the desert running dry
I’ve tried my best as the sea can’t be seen
I’ve went to the top and straight to the bottom
I’ve eaten bugs and drank some ****
As the sun keeps burning the wilderness seeds
Well babe, I’m just a storyteller
Who gets into chilly nights full of gloom
Cause the southern lights are hard to find

You’ve said you’ve went to a place of doom
Where the sludge and grind did a number to your psyche
And you fall helplessly with the devil in disguise
You gave it all with nothing to lose
As the ghoul enchants you for pleasure while he plays with ******
Well babe, I am myself a character
From many tales of joy and pain
I’ve written all of’em to not get insane

Don’t send me gifts I can’t repay
Don’t send me words I can’t respond
Don’t give me hopes I can’t provide
And don’t make give it another try
As I’m feeling you could change your mind
Well Babe, I ain’t the one you really need
It’s been a while since I felt some peace being at your side
You made your choice, you knew the rules, but you weren’t wise

As the clock of mine keeps ticking
And through the years passing going faster
I still feel the ache and the love for you
With the memories of happiness and sorrow
As you went with the devil I called my friend
Well Babe, you who treated me like your kin
How our bond too far gone once was so narrow
Maybe it was a mere illusion from the flaming moon

I'm actually making a record now which I want to present it later this year, It's the typical "Confessional Singer-Songwriter" record, like Neil Young in Harvest, with some blues and rock, I'm doing it because I want to get liberated from some deep emotions I have, and this is the only way I feel I can do it.

Let's see where this goes.

Cheers

posted January 16, 2015 10:54 PM            

I'm still learning to make better lyrics, without making them too straightfoward, I think lyrics should be more flexible, not too personal, except when it's necessary.

posted January 17, 2015 08:21 PM            

I love it! especially the opening first six lines. Grabbed me right away...

Did you ever youtube any of your work?

You say you're doing it in the style of Neil Young in Harvest...

(music) Old Man, & Heart of Gold (Neil Young, 1998, Harvest) [7:09] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zBFGkUmVkAs

hmmmm. LF? I wonder how it would sound if you went a bit 'darker' in your style?

'Neil Young' has a lighter voice... How's yours?

For me, I can imagine these lyrics fitting a gritty more gritty style like 'Leonard Cohen' type? .... I guess it would depend on your age, and/or the timbre of your voice?

Whatever way, DF? ~~ Make it yours!
Wishing you great successes. And welcome once again to our creative expressions corner. Glad you've joined us!

posted January 18, 2015 03:03 PM            

@mirage 29, I do have some songs on youtube, solo and with my band Paper Jam which have some other names before xD

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wj6g16jo87o&list=PL36rVB2NxsXaNc-LqIpulgV3eTE4vYZ1E

I also have my soundcloud channel which I have demos from my band and my upcoming record
https://soundcloud.com/luisfer-torres

For being a 23 year old kiddo I have a pretty raspy baritone voice.

I look to do it in the Harvest style but in reality it's more like Blood on the Tracks, or in my case a Layla and Other Assorted Love Songs by Derek & the Dominoes, the darkness, longing and deep pain involved in the songs.

And when the record it's out I'll put it out here with a bandcamp link, cause I'll release it online first, it cost a lot of money to make it physical.

Ayelet, yes indeed, but I just want to change my style after this period ends, I feel exhausted after what I've experienced, which I put it out into the lyrics, and I just want to change myself, it's necessary.

posted February 17, 2015 11:55 AM            

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Originally posted by Pearlty:

Glad you've decided to share your poems/lyrics here. Looking forward to reading more. I like this set of lyrics, it's not repetetive like some lyrics out there can be. This is rather expressive, invigorating, and as mentioned above interesting.

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