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Topic: First experiment of narrative
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LF DX
Knowflake Posts: 349
From: Paraguay
Registered: Sep 2014
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posted September 06, 2016 01:09 PM
  
"I’ve got myself wondering what went wrong after 14 years, what has killed the love I had with Brenda? The constant bickering, the silent treatments, the not so secret infidelities; yeah, there was a lot of **** going on, and I kept it all well under my sleeve, cause I had love for her, deep love, it was just one moment that I decided: “I’ve had enough, I can’t deal with you anymore, I feel stranded like a nomad, I can’t see the woman I’ve loved, I see a ghost that haunts my life on a daily basis, the happily ever after it’s nothing but ******** ”. I’ve tried to act like a man, but that’s also ******** , I want to cry, I want to feel sad, I want to stay in my ******* bed alone wondering what went wrong, I’m tired to portraying the tough macho guy at this point in my life, to what cost?, nothing but getting sicker as the years go by. What kind of example I gave to my son of being a tough ******* ? Making grow the assholery in this world that has enough of it… what a pile of **** . I was a fool of keeping this going, she’s a fool for pretending it worst, while she was the one that wanted out first, and then it grew, the confusion, the distress, the strife, the hatred; it grew like a parasite that engulfed our supposed happy home and it got fed up until it exploded all, leaving a dirty mess on everyone. Yeah, we’re both guilty on this, we left two children permanently scarred, and I kept for them the circle of trauma, the circle of life…"IP: Logged |
Ayelet
Knowflake Posts: 1927
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Registered: Sep 2010
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posted September 07, 2016 06:01 PM
Interesting expression of feelings in prose, LF DX. Go on with it!  IP: Logged |
Pearlty
Moderator Posts: 1505
From: Ohio
Registered: Jan 2012
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posted September 08, 2016 09:00 AM
I think your experiment is a success, very good. IP: Logged |
mirage29
Knowflake Posts: 6168
From: us
Registered: May 2012
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posted September 08, 2016 05:24 PM
Yes, Keep going..... Powerful! EDIT 9/15/2016 ADDING...
Narrative 2 ... LFDX http://www.linda-goodman.com/ubb/Forum17/HTML/003254.html ADD 10/13/2016 Thursday
Narrative 3 - Walking In The Rain
... LFDX http://www.linda-goodman.com/ubb/Forum17/HTML/003265.html IP: Logged |
Randall
Webmaster Posts: 70830
From: Saturn next to Charmaine
Registered: Apr 2009
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posted October 10, 2016 02:19 PM
Good stuff!IP: Logged | |
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