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BlackSwan
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posted July 07, 2020 09:42 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for BlackSwan     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Hello All!

Since I have discovered Linda and this wonderful website I have started to become obsessed with Lexigramming. I know that there are basic principle rules/ some dos and donts, what I am really hoping for is a bit of guidance/feedback when it comes to composing poetry through the magic of Lexigram!

I have been working on this poem for this person that I love with a fever. Below are the letters of his full name (first middle and last), I do not want to actually write his name down for privacy reasons. So I just compiled the letters in his name, they are as following:

CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW

If its easier here they are as vowels/consonants:

EEEEIIO / CHKLLNNPRRSTVW

Below is a poem I am workin on and all I want to know from you wonderful advanced Lexigram masters, is if I am doing this right? Am I using the correct format? Is there any tips or tricks when composing? can you spot any critical mistakes?? I know there are a couple words that are not spelt correct however I have not added any letters that aren’t in his name, just rearranged the spelling until I can find another correct word to use in its place. Exmaple PHIRE=FIRE since he doesn’t have an F in his name.

Anyways I would LOVE to know what your thoughts are...please go easy on me I am a newbie:

CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW

OH! HOW SHE’LL COVET HIS LOVE!
HIS LIPS SWEET LIKE KIWI
HIS SKIN TWINKLES LIKE PERIWINKLE IN WINTER
NO ONE WILL EVER OVERTHROW HIM
ON HER THRONE OF LOVE.
SHE HOPES HE KNOWS THIS...
IT IS SHE WHO THROWS HIM THE PEN
TO NOTE THEIR LOVERS LORE
HE RE-WRITES THE SCRIPT OVER N OVER

IN HER VIEW,
HE IS THE STOIC HERO,
LION LIKE, ERECT.
ELECTRIC AND RECEPTIVE
THO SHE IS INCLINED TO THINK HIM EVIL
LIKE HE IS THE INNKEEPER OF HELL
SHE, HIS KEEN CLIENT THROWS HIM
THREE PENCE PER WEEK
IT IS THE TOLL SHE RENTS
TO LIVE IN HIS PHIRE HOTEL
IT WILL SLOWLY KILL HER,
LIKE NICOTINE IN HER VEINS.
HOWEVER, SHE KEEPS STILL
FOR CENTILLION EONS
SHE’LL SEETH IN HIS LOVE
HE WILL NEVER EVICT HER.

<3

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BlackSwan
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posted July 07, 2020 09:44 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for BlackSwan     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
I just noticed Electric has two C's in it!!! DARN hahah first mistake

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BlackSwan
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posted July 08, 2020 12:07 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for BlackSwan     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Also is Lexxigrammer still around these days!?

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Randall
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posted July 08, 2020 04:05 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
She pops in from time to time.

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posted August 05, 2020 04:54 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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ballerina
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posted August 15, 2020 12:24 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for ballerina     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Wow! BlackSwan, you're a
natural at lexigramming!...

------------------
All my love, with all my Heart
lotusheartone/Emeraldopal

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posted September 17, 2020 01:10 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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posted October 24, 2020 12:41 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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posted August 11, 2021 06:28 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Randall     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
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Lexxigramer
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posted October 03, 2021 05:59 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
quote:
Originally posted by BlackSwan:
Hello All!

Since I have discovered Linda and this wonderful website I have started to become obsessed with Lexigramming. I know that there are basic principle rules/ some dos and donts, what I am really hoping for is a bit of guidance/feedback when it comes to composing poetry through the magic of Lexigram!

I have been working on this poem for this person that I love with a fever. Below are the letters of his full name (first middle and last), I do not want to actually write his name down for privacy reasons. So I just compiled the letters in his name, they are as following:

CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW

If its easier here they are as vowels/consonants:

EEEEIIO / CHKLLNNPRRSTVW

Below is a poem I am workin on and all I want to know from you wonderful advanced Lexigram masters, is if I am doing this right? Am I using the correct format? Is there any tips or tricks when composing? can you spot any critical mistakes?? I know there are a couple words that are not spelt correct however I have not added any letters that aren’t in his name, just rearranged the spelling until I can find another correct word to use in its place. Exmaple PHIRE=FIRE since he doesn’t have an F in his name.

Anyways I would LOVE to know what your thoughts are...please go easy on me I am a newbie:

CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW

OH! HOW SHE’LL COVET HIS LOVE!
HIS LIPS SWEET LIKE KIWI
HIS SKIN TWINKLES LIKE PERIWINKLE IN WINTER
NO ONE WILL EVER OVERTHROW HIM
ON HER THRONE OF LOVE.
SHE HOPES HE KNOWS THIS...
IT IS SHE WHO THROWS HIM THE PEN
TO NOTE THEIR LOVERS LORE
HE RE-WRITES THE SCRIPT OVER N OVER

IN HER VIEW,
HE IS THE STOIC HERO,
LION LIKE, ERECT.
ELECTRIC AND RECEPTIVE
THO SHE IS INCLINED TO THINK HIM EVIL
LIKE HE IS THE INNKEEPER OF HELL
SHE, HIS KEEN CLIENT THROWS HIM
THREE PENCE PER WEEK
IT IS THE TOLL SHE RENTS
TO LIVE IN HIS PHIRE HOTEL
IT WILL SLOWLY KILL HER,
LIKE NICOTINE IN HER VEINS.
HOWEVER, SHE KEEPS STILL
FOR CENTILLION EONS
SHE’LL SEETH IN HIS LOVE
HE WILL NEVER EVICT HER.

<3



Will look it over when I get up and go to desk top computer.

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Lexxigramer
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posted October 03, 2021 06:05 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
quote:
Originally posted by BlackSwan:
Also is Lexxigrammer still around these days!?

Welcome BlackSwan!!!! .
Yes I am still here. Been very I'll for da long time, on top of being disabled since 1989, things have become worse, seriously degenerating syndromes etc. Then Covid hit and cancer. Husband in much the same state. Sigh....but yes, am still here and trying to get back to posting more. Hopefully insurance will pay for all my vision and cancer etc. Issues. I will look your long poem over when I can get on the desktop. Please bear with me. Pardon any typos, will fix any when I can see a bit better on bigger screen.

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Lexxigramer
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posted October 04, 2021 10:25 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Yeah messed up bad have to use magnifying glasses and contacts and reading glasses all at the same time, and still barely see these days.cannot afford to get vision correction devices and 2 surgery too for cataracts etc. Macular degeneration too. Fun. Ugh. So please bear with me. I am doing my best.

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Lexxigramer
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posted October 04, 2021 10:34 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Not done yet but see that you correctly used a contraction for the phrase "she will", by using "she'll" instead. If you could not spell it out as she will you couldn't use the contraction she'll. Most folks miss that rule when lexagramming.

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posted October 04, 2021 10:39 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Using fake words and misspellings are invalid for lexagramming. you simply do not try to force the words to show when they are not in all actuality really there to use.

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posted October 04, 2021 10:42 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
Overthrow cannot be used. You have only one copy of the letter o to use. Overthrow has two copies.

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Lexxigramer
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posted October 04, 2021 10:52 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
In lieu of fire....consider such as......
hot
shine
Hot as Hell's son is he within
His love so eerily hot

Rough examples but you get my drift right?
Will ponder more on other words or phrases to use instead of fire.

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Lexxigramer
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posted October 04, 2021 10:56 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Lexxigramer     Edit/Delete Message   Reply w/Quote
I shall return asap! Please bear with me.

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